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Egyptian Priestess
Linen falls to the desert.
Dying eyes cannot
See the rainfall...only hear.
Another tomb waits.
Eyes close on his tears.
Elysabeth Faslund...poemhunter
2007-12-19 06:22:03 · 7 answers · asked by Elysabeth 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
For the time being, forget the 5-7-5. The 16th Century Japanese Masters of Haiku viewed syllables a bit differently...I've read as little as 14 syllables and as many as 21.
2007-12-19 06:50:03 · update #1
Excellent work. You are right not all haikus are 5-7-5 I like how you included Egyptains along with your description of the scenery
2007-12-19 12:11:49 · answer #1 · answered by die for poetry 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Haiku if a beautiful art form transcending beyond mere poetry and into the presentation of the words and imagery on the scrolls. Reade some of the greats, they are masters in their own right. In so few syllables so much is said and more is done than is said!
Valrie in Ocala, FL
2007-12-19 12:24:37 · answer #2 · answered by mariposavalrie 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
The second stanza is a 7-5-5, so it is not a normal haiku.
2007-12-19 06:25:19 · answer #3 · answered by mina74 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
a haiku would be the same in reverse...
..defined as 17 syllables, split into lines of 5-7-5...
...i do like seeing any type of "innovation"...though, if it's an innovative and different style, then it's its own different thing, ( an altered haiku )
2007-12-19 06:41:15 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 4⤊ 0⤋
I refuse to answer this question!
"Linen falls to the desert"; "Eyes close on his tears". How I love these lines...
I just want to enjoy reading, thank you!
2007-12-19 07:06:27 · answer #5 · answered by Lady Annabella-VInylist 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Very nice. Hai'ku has lots of ru's...I think you can also make new ones. TD
2007-12-19 06:40:19 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
unique
2007-12-19 06:57:44 · answer #7 · answered by glamour04111 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋