Does this question make sense?

Question

"Not only is it substantial to conduct this experiment because of the aforementioned relevance, but also because we so often seek exigent weather information and it only makes sense to obtain the gratification faster through the knowledge of these results."

*Does it make sense?
*Is there anyway I can make it into two sentences?
*Any suggestions to make it better?

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Answer 1

"Not only is it substantial to conduct this experiment because of the aforementioned relevance..."
- This is needlessly wordy, and apparently you already listed this reason. Depending on the context, you could probably just replace this entire phrase with the word "Also..." as it is implied that the information you are giving is in addition to the information you already gave. Maybe "Another reason is because..." would fit. If you insist on leaving it, something like "This experiment is relevant for the aforementioned reasons, as well as..."

"...but also because we so often seek exigent weather information and it only makes sense to obtain the gratification faster through the knowledge of these results."
- You seem to use words again for the sake of using them. Maybe this is some academic paper in which you intend to sound intelligent by using such words, but being so verbose isn't typically good. Try something like "It makes sense to run this experiment because we seek current weather conditions, and these tests will give us the results more quickly," or something to that extent. I looked up "exigent" and I'm not sure you used it correctly, but you may know better than I do. Again, if you insist on using the big words, make sure you know how to use them. Use "gratification" instead of "the gratification," for example.

All in all, though, I think I could understand what you were trying to say, so it makes sense. I don't think you need to make it into two sentences if you cut out the first half of the sentence, which it seems like you would have addressed elsewhere. Those are my suggestions to make it better! Hope I could help.

Answer 2

It makes sense but it doesn't read well. You're right to suggest it needs to be broken down into two sentences.

Not only is this experiment significant because of the aforementioned relevance, but also because we so often seek exigent weather information. It only makes sense to obtain the gratification faster through the knowledge of these results.

Answer 3

It is important to conduct this experiment because of the aforementioned relevance; and also because the results will more quickly provide the exigent weather information we so often seek.

Answer 4

We are conducting an experiment that has relevance to current weather conditions. We believe this experiment will give results pertinent results