can i borrow a bit of your time?

Question

i. i just love to hear comments on the songs that i wrote and i'm wondering if you can check this out:
http://soundclick.com/share?songid=5890761

the song is entitled "Game Over".

Chorus:
I must admit that I'd been lonely for some time after you left.
But that's over now.
You're just a part of my past, a part of my past, a part of my past.
So get away, move away.
I don't need you here anyway.

i'm used to comments about my voice. i'm ok with that 'coz it's true. haha!

Answer 1

The lyrics are interesting and real. The game reference makes it sound like you are young but that's okay.

Your voice could definitely use some work, it is distinctive and could be great if you develop it a little. If you are down with changing it, and if you are a student, you can get some direction from joining the choir. They won't turn you into an opera singer...they will teach you about breathing, and how the throat and nose affect your singing. They will teach you about your diaphragm, projection (singing in large spaces), diction (pronunciation) etc. All good to know no matter what your fav style of music to sing.

From what I can tell, you need to generate sound from your belly instead of your head, your air is resonating too much from your nose. Get some lessons to learn to correct this.

The criticism, by the way, is because I think you have a chance to be really good, NOT because I think you are hopeless. You do show great musical aptitude. Did you play the guitar too?

Answer 2

Hey,
awesome song dude, really great lyrics, you should become a lyricist and get famous, you have the talent of songwriting, use it!!

Answer 3

It was so good, the excitement built up in my system and I had to go poop.

Answer 4

it was ok. Practice and you'll sound way good.
good luck

Answer 5

liked it a lot man!

rocks!

Answer 6

All right!!!

Answer 7

pretty good.