Senryu # 1
His deviant shell
breeds lascivious feelings
and wanton ardor.
senryu #2
Our love has become
a noxious red wine in
fallacy's chalice.
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haiku #1
Rainstorm's pure offspring
caresses the flesh of me,
suffocating pain.
Haiku #2
Diamond paradise
glitters like crystal glass and
veils flaws of the past.
2007-12-16 14:42:57 · 3 answers · asked by Taja B 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Excellent senryu and haiku.
They are clear, evoking a definite image and emotion.
Keep up the good work . . . ! :-)
2007-12-23 23:25:28 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great one liners, quite interesting.
Reminds that:
If everything seems to be going well,
you have obviously
overlooked something.
.
2007-12-20 08:16:23 · answer #2 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like them. They show sophistication. Very good. TD
2007-12-16 23:15:55 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋