Can someone check my cover letter?

Question

Dear hiring manager

I was interested to find that 14-year-olds are able to be employed at Market Basket. I am a dedicated and reliable individual with experience in the retail industry. I most recently worked at Dunkin Donuts. My responcabilities included, taking orders from customers and making certain that they were correctley recieved as soon as possible, keeping my work enviornment as clean and ordley, inventory managment, and repleneshment..

I would love to bring my experience and enthusiasm to work for Market Basket. A refrence is attached. Please contact me at *phone number* or at *second phone number* if you have any questions or would like to schedule an interview.

Thank you very much for your time and attention. I hope to hear from you soon.

Cordially,

Richard

Answer 1

Looks good, just change responcabilities to responsibilities.

Answer 2

Here ya go! Corrections in parenthesis

Dear hiring manager,

I was interested(Replace with "I found it interesting") to find that 14-year-olds are able to be employed at Market Basket. I am a dedicated and reliable individual with experience in the retail (add: and customer service) industry. I most recently worked at Dunkin Donuts. My responcabilities(Spelling) included, taking orders from customers and making certain that they were correctley(Spelling) recieved(Spelling) as soon as possible, keeping my work enviornment(Spelling) as (remove "as") clean and ordley(Spelling), inventory managment, and repleneshment.(Spelling).

I would love to bring my experience and enthusiasm to work for Market Basket. A refrence(Spelling) is attached. Please contact me at *phone number* or at *second phone number* if you have any questions or would like to schedule an interview.

Thank you very much for your time and attention. I hope to hear from you soon.

Cordially,

Richard

Answer 3

How about "I am a 14 year old male who lives in (town/city) and would like to apply for a job at the Market Basket located in (town/city). I most recently worked at the Dunkin Donuts in (town/city) and my responsibilties included....... I believe you will find that my supervisor/manager considered me a dedicated and reliable employee and would be happy to recommend me to you.

Please correct the spelling of these words. Responsibilities. Correctly. Received. Environment. Orderly. Replenishment. Reference.

I would advise you to bring your application to the hiring manager in person. Try to meet him or her long enough to make a positive initial impression. Firm hand shake. Good eye contact. Speak up without being loud. Thank him or her for taking time to speak to you, and ask when you could expect to hear from him or her. Then patience, and follow up if you haven't heard from him or her a day or two beyond the date you should have heard fro Market Basket.

Answer 4

Change the following:

responcabilities -> responsibilities

correctley -> correctly

recieved -> received

enviornment -> environment

ordley -> orderly

managment -> management

repleneshment -> replenishment

.. -> . (one period instead of two)

refrence -> reference

Suggestions:

Dear Hiring Manager,

I think capitalization looks good up there because it's kind of a title.

Answer 5

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Answer 6

I like it. You appear very sincere and hardworking.
But you have several spelling errors. Use spell check!