Hi, I just made this poem. Do you like it?
A smile,
A million tears.
A laugh,
A million fears.
The sea,
Is just like me.
A beauty ,
I shall see.
That is me.
2007-12-16 00:04:51 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Sorry I need to alter one line. I put 'I shall see' and it should be 'Only I shall see'.
2007-12-16 00:05:32 · update #1
Without strictly judging the piece, I have to wonder about the last line, modified of not.
Certainly in the context of ones life; living it positively; "liking" ones self, very often spills over/ transfers and becomes evident to others.
Steven Wolf
"I've never stressed over being too TALL; I'm not
I'm not at all bothered by being short. I FIT where the Tall may not.
Not concerned with a MID point; I can stand on a "Kleenex", and reach anything I want."
2007-12-16 00:26:44 · answer #1 · answered by DIY Doc 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋
how old are you...that will amke it easy to criticise...coz if u r more than 15 years of age then you should not call this a POEM dear
2007-12-16 03:35:14 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
well i liked this poem i admit. although it is not one of the best one's iv read. still if you keep this up i think your poetry can get pretty good
2007-12-16 00:33:01 · answer #3 · answered by shelly_noble24 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
yes
2007-12-16 00:14:19 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
yes, it's sweet
nice images
2007-12-16 03:36:22 · answer #5 · answered by Analyst 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it, it's really good!
2007-12-16 02:07:40 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
yes, i do its really CoOoL!!!!!!
2007-12-19 09:46:56 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋