me as me
a contrast between darkness and light
hidding in the warmth of night ,
yet looking farward to the light of day.
moody, but never shalow
kind but not everbering.
fun yet controled
a contrast, a fight
never a winning side
darkness is my escape,
light is my slvation
2007-12-15 20:00:30 · 11 answers · asked by gretch 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
got it spell checked Here it is
me as me
a contrast between darkness and light
hiding in the warmth of night ,
yet looking forward to the light of day.
moody, but never shallow
kind but not overbearing.
fun yet controlled
a contrast, a fight
never a winning side
darkness is my escape,
light is my salvation
2007-12-15 20:27:14 · update #1
i like it is very thoughtful, and really shows your polar opposites about you. i understood every word, which usually helps me like poems more. keep writing, and the best of luck. =]
2007-12-15 20:16:34 · answer #1 · answered by skye 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice work, but you seriously need to use your spell check!
People tend to judge intelligence by things like grammar and spelling. If you intend on being a poet/writer, then this is your art and you should take it seriously enough to spend 4 seconds on a simple spell check.
2007-12-15 20:10:24 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
The spelling needs to be corrected as it takes away from the flow of the poem while reading it.
Other than that, I think it is not bad at all.
So much better!!!!!!!!!!!!
Well Done!
I like it!
2007-12-15 20:07:03 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
deep moving meaningful ithink i can relate, but left thinking. yep i'd have to say i like it, like it a lot act. watch the spelling though, for instance did you really mean to say everbearing or did u mean overbearing? totally different meanings just by 1 letter. your on a roll keep it up.
2007-12-15 20:07:04 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I read it on your page and I like it alot just checking the spelling.
I have seen some of your poems here and I must say you are very talented!
2007-12-15 20:02:41 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow, that poem is great, really emotional, nothing like the cheesy stuff I usually write in my poems =)
2007-12-15 20:08:33 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think you need to do a spell check other than that its pretty good kind of goth like though..
2007-12-15 20:03:40 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
good job...
(suggestion: double check your spelling).
2007-12-15 20:03:00 · answer #8 · answered by valvalhoff 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you are dipolar
2007-12-15 20:05:21 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow...That's really deep. I love it. :)
2007-12-15 20:03:02 · answer #10 · answered by xx SUNKiSSED xx 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋