Tell me your ideas?

Question

On this poem,Im not really some poet or anything,but here it goes

Sometimes I knock
Sometimes I intrudge
At times I refuse to simply amuse
I consider myself confused
I fly so free and high
Your always left asking why?
Why do I say the words I speak
Why do I hurt yet help the weak
Everything I do is wrong
Every breath I take
I hesitate
Im falling deeper into my own fall
And your arms are never there
Your voice never calls
That stare is always fades away
You hear me call but you change your name
Im ready to debate
Just to simply reply
Yet I must wait
until someone opens the gate

Answer 1

i think you could be a good poet.
about your poem, I think you should try a diffrent beginning.
and then come up with a title. good luck and best wishes!

Answer 2

Free verse lines about some subjective feelings--you ought to look at what is being published at Poem hunters and find some inspiration there--lots of poems from poets both dead and living also from common folk who wouldn't call themselves poets--post it there and you'll get better feedback than here. Write on!

Answer 3

Forgive this and have a chuckle. Did you write something? Sorry I was distracted by the image. :)

Steven Wolf

Obviously a very pointed statement about a very personal issue. No offense, but I often wonder when reading such submissions. I wonder if what is expressed here, publically, is ever expressed privately to the "object" in question?

Answer 4

It means that either your or your? is expressing the inner voice of expression are ready to come out.But,there could be some obstacles in the entire way.So,don't worry about them and go ahead if you have some courage and certainly either of you will get the aim,no doubt. Good luck.....