Does it make sense to say "once the wolf got inside the house, the slaughter begins."?

Question

I'm writing an essay. I'm trying to describe a precess where people were decieved into trusting someone, and that someone starts to exploit them (for money.)
So, once the guy (con man) got your trust, he begins to try to extract money from you. Selling you lies that would make you give out your money.
If I wrote, "once the wolf got inside the house, the slaughter begins" does it make sense?
or should I write, "once the wolf got inside the farm, the slaughter begins."???

thank you. :-)

Okay, besides the past tense thing, is it confusing? conceptully does it make sense?

Answer 1

Good image with the notion of a wolf (deceiver) getting into a secure area. I'd use a "henhouse" rather than a house. There is already an expression about a fox in a henhouse with pretty much the same effect- you'd lose chickens and the fox would be the entity doing the damage.

The other suggestion would be to keep the tenses the same- either "the wolf got inside ... the slaughter began" or "the wolf gets inside ... the slaughter begins." It's confusing to make the first part in past tense and the second part present tense.

The concept is good. Without knowing more, I'm not sure if you're describing a potential situation, in which case you'd use the future tense or a past event, in which case you'd use the past (or even perfect) tense. Since you say, " ... where people *were deceived* ..." the situation you're describing seems to have occurred in the past.

The image of a wolf is good- culturally a wolf is a large, dangerous animal. And I guess the wolf's prey would be simple, gullible people in your scenario.

Good luck! You're doing well

Answer 2

The people were deceived. Remember your spelling rules (i before e except after c)? Good essays should have proper spelling as well as proper grammar. The correct sentence should read "Once the wolf got inside the house, the slaughter BEGAN". All the verbs in a sentence should have matching tense. Got is past participle, begins is present participle. I think it would sound better with both verbs present participle, because you are describing a precept that is occurring in the present. Thusly written "Once the wolf gets inside the house, the slaughter begins." Wouldn't you agree?

Answer 3

Grammatically if should be....Once the wolf got inside of the house, the slaughter began. You have to make sure you use the same tense in your sentence. Or you can change it and write...Once the wolf gets inside the house, the slaughter begins.

Answer 4

You are mixing tenses in your sentence.

It should be:
Present tense -
1. "once the wolf gets inside the door, the slaughter begins"
2. "once the wolf gets through the door, the slaughter begins"
3. "once the wolf gets on to the farm, the slaughter begins"

Past tense -
1. "once the wolf got inside the house, the slaughter began"
2. "once the wolf got through the door, the slaughter began"
3. "once the wolf got on to the farm, the slaughter began"

Future tense -
1. "once the wolf gets inside the house, the slaughter will begin"

And so on..........

Answer 5

no, cuz you say "once the wolf GOT inside the house, the slaughter BEGINS." "got" is past tense so "begins" needs to be "began." "begins" is present tense,

Answer 6

well -once the wolf got inside the house, the slaughter began- makes more sense to me not "begins" idk just sounds better to me

hopes this helps...i doubt it