Once as white as the snow upon the ground, now the dirt is all around. The guilt, a feeling I cannot escape. Now I know my fate, for I will die by you even if it is by my own hand. I cannot live with the memory, my death, my final breath all your fault. The sound of screams fill my ears, far away and disappears. I feel the metal rip my skin, the subtle sound of my heart pounding' in my ears. The gasps confirm all my fears, upon my cheek and on my lips I feel and taste the salty tears. Am I dead or alive, was it all a dream, will I survive? you decide
2007-12-15 13:44:04 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Social Science ➔ Psychology
Nice feel for rhythm and cadence. Nice imagery. Not anguished and angry enough to be written by a suicidal person, it sounds more like someone healing from a bad experience, such as an auto accident or having been beaten up. I like the ambiguity at the end. I hope you are okay. This poem makes me think you will be.
2007-12-15 14:01:13 · answer #1 · answered by Mother Amethyst 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Teenage angst just seems so real sometimes doesn't it. You are not alone..Survivors survive...Look within yourself and feel the gift of life, hope exists for those with the courage to find it. Things get better, things get worse, things sometimes just change. Enjoy the ride, it's the only one you get, and getting old ( Like Me) isn't so bad, I just can't remember why I was so lonely and scared and wasted some of the best years of my life..Good Luck, my friend, I hope you find what your hoping for..
2007-12-15 21:56:19 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Why you think so....? god has given this beautifull wourld to us enjoy it.....Belive in God...and do best possible time is never the same....it keeps changinging.....
Remeber one thing Every thing in ths world has solution which you can have by facing it.....but there is no sollution if dont weant to face.So be brave and face the world.
2007-12-15 22:44:36 · answer #3 · answered by Rajeev H 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wake up and smell the roses
they bloom sometime after spring
after snowfall and running noses
returns a warm earth and joy of living.
2007-12-15 21:57:04 · answer #4 · answered by cavassi 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Love , is best defined , by a bible verse located in the new testament,,, 1st Corinthians ,13,, infact the whole chapter. chapter 13 , and remember this , it's not enough to wish you had have done that ,
2007-12-15 21:58:08 · answer #5 · answered by darkcloud 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
well it just sound s like you are depressed about something but i dont have enough information to say if you are suicidal but seriously God putu onnt his earth for a reason and u r still here for a reason and if you hurt yourself in ne way it is helping to kill Gods wish, every thing happens for a readon and if something bad happened to you God made it happen for a reason, and im sure if you wait and see something better will happen to you.......
2007-12-15 21:54:47 · answer #6 · answered by Liv4everX3 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Very creative poetry. I am impressed. To me it doesn't matter what you are. Just in case. Every case of suicide, just before the act is accomplished, everyone changes their mind.
2007-12-15 21:53:29 · answer #7 · answered by arvindrenamed 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Suicidal no, dealing w/ a bit of depression yes.
2007-12-15 21:52:29 · answer #8 · answered by Jennifer B 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
stop being so emo and get over it...
your suicidal if you think about killing yourself (in which case i think anyone giving answers is legally bound to say get help from a professional... or maybe even a stranger.... but get help)
2007-12-15 22:07:29 · answer #9 · answered by darkdemonkelzad666 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I suggest you see a mental health professional asap.
It does show quiet negative thoughts and you need to explore it with a professional to see what is happening and why?
2007-12-15 21:52:22 · answer #10 · answered by lil_star 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋