My Newest Poem, "Untold"...Your thoughts?

Question

How can I forgive you
when you hurt me?

How can you live,
when you've abandoned me,
and broken promises you couldn't keep?

How can I heal inside
if I know you won't be here
to love me
the way I should be loved?

How do you sleep at night
when you don't take time to call
to even see about me?

Just leave me in the middle of nowhere,
just 3 months old,
to get your fix,
and drink your drink,
but where was I in your mind?

Was I even in your heart?

I feel like I'm still that child
waiting for someone's love,
someone's affection,
and someone to give me the time of day,
and you're still out there
place unknown,
hurting yourself
and hurting me.

Do you ever get tired?
I just wanna push you away,
because you're no good like this
.
I wish you were my real mother,
and not someone who gave birth
to something.

Answer 1

thats great ! man i feel you bro and what i respect is the way you channel your problems thru Poetry. more power to you my freind !

Answer 2

Great read!

This is one of those poems you hope the writer will make a cont'd, as in part 2. Let the reader follow the author through the months or the years.

I loved the third last stanza. Hope to read more of your poetry.

Answer 3

Wow, said story. I hope if it is true you can seek out some counseling and talk about this, forgiveness is about healing you.

I'd like to see you now write a piece from the mother's perspective. That would be interesting. Keep writing!

Answer 4

i like the stanza...i feel like i m still that child...and before that its not that appealing..great effort...i just loved the ending thought

Answer 5

It's okay...too clingy.

Answer 6

wow that was amazing!