Do you like poem about the Scotland?

Question

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Swing the scythe lively, lads
Harvest’s upon us now
Barleycorn’s brown, ready to malt
Fire the peat slowly
Spring water and grist to grind
To sweetwort in washback
Lively yeast is applied

Into the still goes the wash
Caldron will bring us low wine
Then into the spirit still
Last to the oaken barrels
Then stored by the sea
For a very long a time

The Yanks make good Bourbon
Tennessee fired oak style
Using the casks just one time
Send them to Scotland, men
We’ll store strong drink within
To be sipped on,
In thirty years time

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Answer 1

30 years time is only for blended scotch. Fine single malt whiskey reaches perfection ar 12 years.

But the poem was great. "Weel doon Cutty Sark," as Tam O'Shanter would say.

Oh. And Tenessee Whiskey reuses the barrels. It's Kentucky Bourbon that only ages in new oak.

Answer 2

You Do mean a "poem about the 'scotch'", right?! I love a wee dram myself (not quite so wee...)

I'd definitely change "...is applied" to something more 'active' (yuk yuk) and poem-friendly, like if it was tossed in, sifted, poured, whatever.

"For a very long time" seems like a weak spot. There must be a more poetic way to impress that sense on a reader.

I'd also hyphenate "fired-oak" to eliminate possible initial confusion in that line (fired has many meanings).

I'm still not sure about this form in general. You're already quite close to blank verse, so why not go whole hog? I think the poem would impress more if it had that hale & hearty rhythm informing its treatment of a hardy drink produced by hard work.

Answer 3

Gotta love them "Yanks' *^_^*

OMG

I felt as if
I were there,
I ran the fields,
I sipped of wine
Had too much Bourbon
and tripped this time
I crawled the fields
like I was there
and felt as if
I drank too much...


I totally loved this write my friend, very different and full of atmosphere! A write well worth reading again *^_^*

Answer 4

History well done!! A song to be sung in a pub, low lit, smokey, with rousing cheers,"Bring us another!"

Ends in irony, funny irony...but can you REALLY think those Scots didn't have enough alcohol stashed away for those 30 years...more like a thousand years! Good people!

Elysabeth...poemhunter

Answer 5

Almost sounds like it could be a drinking song in Scotland, of course. Good job, TD

Answer 6

Good poem... reminds me of a favorite Irish song of mine.

"With their pikes upon their shoulders by the rising of the moon..."

Answer 7

I do like it! I was born there myself and it is the home of my mother's family. Very nice!

Answer 8

yes, i like it. it reminds me of an irish, not scottish joke. what is an irish homosexual? a lad who prefers women over whiskey.