I wrote this poem earlier today, and i was wondering opions on it. I want to make it clear and I want to make sure its undersandable to people whom dont know any packground on the situation which i wrote it. What do you take away from it, what do you think i ment by it?? 1-10 what do you think? THANK YOU!
2007-12-14 08:50:38 · 9 answers · asked by Sincerely Yours 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
They said it would fail,
and I proved them right,
but I hope for a chance,
to hold our friendship tight.
I just can’t let it go,
and I don’t know why,
I hope it wasn't a waste,
a waste of time to try.
The future is a blur,
I hope to make things right,
so you don’t have to feel,
like you felt last night.
To see you tears,
it breaks my heart,
knowing that yours,
has already fallen a part.
Tears of lost hopes
fell down your face,
leaving your heart,
without a trace.
I have learned,
that love comes with pain,
and in this case,
I’m the one to blame.
Sorry is never enough,
I struggle for these lines,
to explain how I feel,
when we had such good times.
2007-12-14 08:51:05 · update #1
We've been threw a lot,
nothing stood in our way,
you where my friend,
and I hope one to stay.
And if it’s too hard,
I will not disagree;
do what’s best for you,
as I did for me.
You will always have a place,
deep within my heart,
and if you’re ever ready,
our friendship can start.
2007-12-14 08:51:23 · update #2
I think it was about the troubles of friendship, relationships. I take away with it the fact that not everything can go right, tears may be shed. It was beautiful, but a tad bit unclear. A 9.5 is my rating. It was very heartfelt, you should keep writing without a doubt!
2007-12-14 09:10:12 · answer #1 · answered by El.. 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very Nice...I'm a very sensitive "part-time" poet too....well now to answer you-
Ans 1: The raw sentivity expressed to make one feel of love and the bosom camaraderie between 2 friends in deep love..
Ans 2: It was quite straightforward...you expressed the love of your life and the pretext of that miss the one u love & u partly blame urself to be apart in this juncture which obviously seems temporary due to the strength of the love you feel there is between you and your significant other...
Ans 3: Well, it seemed more straightforward & specific than with metaphors or flowery literature...6.5 if taken seriously or 7...overall pretty good...
2007-12-14 17:37:05 · answer #2 · answered by arijitm2000 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
on a scale of 1 to 10, I give it a 3
2007-12-14 16:54:09 · answer #3 · answered by Matthew O 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its obviously about a friendship. Its good 7
2007-12-14 16:54:42 · answer #4 · answered by Angel G 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very well expressed emotionally.
The only negative, is that you seem to refer an aweful lot to the friendship that "was", rather than the friendship that "is"
2007-12-14 16:54:34 · answer #5 · answered by Joe R 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very deep feels like its comin from within your heart rather than just your head.. very creative ..i like it..
Love Always
2007-12-14 16:59:33 · answer #6 · answered by Apolo 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
so sweet! 8
2007-12-14 16:59:02 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
OMG it was awesome!!
2007-12-14 17:00:39 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
9.6
2007-12-14 16:54:15 · answer #9 · answered by Hi Im Brad Pitt! 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋