silence
How tragic to you it may seem,
To cleanse my soul of pain.
There may be no tomorrows,
When yesterdays just demean.
A silent cry, I scream aloud,
Yet no one hears but me.
Crushed beneath the shadows,
Of my own burden vast.
Too late to hold on anymore,
Behind my emerald eyes.
The fire once deep inside me,
Has gone out, completeley cold.
Look deep down inside me,
Please tell me what yoiu see,
How deep flows the river of fate,
In the silence of the hours late.
2007-12-14 08:48:45 · 5 answers · asked by The Dark Prince 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I think there is still a fire lit behind your mind's eye. How else do you flow so eloquently?
2007-12-14 12:00:29 · answer #1 · answered by Semp-listic! 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Good job, but I am a little confused. Why did you use rhyming couplets in the final stanza but none in the others? Coincidence or by design? Either way, it's still good.
2007-12-14 16:56:48 · answer #2 · answered by Dondi 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Oh my God your poem was so outstanding and i applaud you for writing this poem' and telling of all your pain.Your beautiful words explaining all your hurt and pain. hit me deep in my heart as i too have felt this way.and wish i could of expressed it as great as you do..... Lots of love always
2007-12-15 12:04:30 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i agree with Dondi first off,, he has a great point.. but this is yet anther one that i love,, its short but to the point.. great job,, what would the world do without you and your writing??!!
2007-12-14 18:18:15 · answer #4 · answered by dragonflyy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this has a really good flow and seems sort of haunting...i love it.
2007-12-14 16:53:12 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋