Do you think I have what it takes to become a famous poet? 3 poems, opinions please??

Question

Poem 1:
My Dear Aunt Dot, left a glock and some blood on my sheets
Told me clean the sh!t up, then she hit the streets
Even though I'm her niece, she copped me a piece
Damn.. what went wrong?
Can't we all just get along, and make hit songs?
B!tches all up in my a$$ like a thong
If this was a show, y'all h0es would get "gonged"
Cause if it's on, then it's on, bring it on
What the fvck you waitin for? C'mon, let's get it on

Poem 2:
To me she was my lover, and also a dear friend,
To others she was a blow up doll, that pleasured my rear end,

The day my sweetheart left me, was the day I smoked some hash,
The cherry bounced from my bong, and landed on her gash.

The melting plastic smelt horrible, the stench of death was bad,
In my memories I'll hold her, like the time I shared her with my dad.

My sweethearts gone for good now, and I'll never forget my Jen,
now I've traded her in for a new model, a lovely gent named Ken.
Now Ken, he made my heart race, it never skipped a beat,
Especially when he jiggled, and played with my man meat...


Poem 3:

Wee Willie Winkie runs through the town,
Flashing all the old ladies by lifting his night-gown,
Tapping at the window, grabbing for his glock,
"Are the women in their beds, for it's now ten o'clock?"
"Hey, Willie Winkie, are you coming in?
Come and have a drink with us, won't you have some gin?,
The wife is spread out on the floor, and she's really cheap,
And here's a naughty midget who will not fall asleep!"
Anything but sleep, you rogue! come and whip some poon,
Come punish this filthy wh0re, slap her with a spoon,
Rumbling, tumbling round about, garnishing his c0ck,
Shrieking like I don't know what, sleeping with the gobbledock.
"Hey, Willie Winkie - a deal is a deal!
See that woman wriggling around like an eel?,
Tugging at his you-know-what, and slapping women's bums
Hey, Willie Winkie - see, there he cuums!"
Weary is the woman who sounds a dirty moan,
A small short little diddle, who can't cvm on his own,
Who always has a battle with sheep before he'll squirt in an eye
But a kiss from her rosy lips makes me say "bye bye".

no, i dont want to be famous, i just wrote that to get more people to read my poem!

Answer 1

Yes. You have a famousness about your literature...

The first two are good Verse Libre (free-form poetry). Funny, disturbing, very artistic.

The last is almost in the style of Ouilipo, where you take an established piece and make fun of it. There are many kinds with lots of funny rules.

That's the good news. Now, get unstuck from the 'potty jokes' and make us something less rudimentary. TD

Answer 2

The third is a parody on an already existing nursery rhyme- kinda cheesy like the "Tic Tac Toe" poem about Barney. The first two weren't even good.

Answer 3

We ALL write with the hopes of being the 5 or so poets in a century that are "famous", as compared to the 100s of millions who write and are not.

Be honest.

Now, you should think about taking a class or 30 if you want to make that happen.

Answer 4

I don't know if you'll ever become a household word, but you have talent and a great sense of humor. These would make excellent rap songs. Still, I wish you'd get out from below the waist and use your talent in a more constructive way.

Answer 5

More like a narrative rap and I doubt it will make you famous but you never know--do you do live readings or stand up slam performances now there's a way to get attention.

Answer 6

Some time ago I made reference to someone as being the worst poet ever, I take it back, you are, they are puerile crap of the first order, take a bow at being the lousiest poet ever, you will get your wish though, you will never be famous

Answer 7

i like the vulgarity of the poems... def thinkn outside the box.. kinda humorous. and entertaining.


but why do you want to be famous??

i write poetry for me, not for others, or to become famous??

Answer 8

These sound like lyrics more than poems. They sound pretty good to me. Not bad at all.

Answer 9

If you wrote this, it's pretty good. Funny, scary and imaginative. Good luck!

Answer 10

yeah you go the creativity, but it sounds more like a rap song than poetry, but whats the difference anyway...they both express your inner feelings...keep making this stuff..its funny!!!!!! hahaha go girls! go girls!!! yeah!!!