*****
The ghost of Sarah Danski moans a long, slow song,
Along the roadway where her life was cut so short,
She calls the name again…she cries about her sin,
So all the world will know that she was killed by him,
The ghost of Meagan Cox is still inside the car,
She wants to wipe the blood off of her body now,
Before someone comes by and sees that she has died,
She always was so careful in her look and style,
The ghost of Mathew Martin has the jug of wine,
He’s trying to make the juice go back inside somehow,
The parts of Bobby’s car are scattered everywhere,
And the rustle in the bushes is him…awake,
He sits up for a moment in the smoke and dust,
With eyes that see the things that just cannot be real,
The horror of it all chills up and down his spine,
And as he tries to stand…six ghostly hands take hold,
*****
2007-12-14 00:50:56 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Where did this funny 12-beat rhythm thingy come from? It's the piano piece that Chico Marx plays in 'A day at the Races.'
2007-12-14 01:09:21 · update #1
E D - this one's number is 2007147 - 147 new pieces in 2007.
2007-12-14 02:09:54 · update #2
I wrote this at midnight last night. It came out just as is.
2007-12-14 02:26:01 · update #3
This is a great poem. I thoroughly enjoyed it - tingles up and down my spine.
2007-12-14 02:14:53 · answer #1 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
The poem flowed so splendidly and was written in such a good manner that you could actually feel and see the whole thing unfold right in front of you.
I truly hope you are trying to get some of your poems published. You are very talented and should use the gift that God gave you.
You are already a professional!!!
2007-12-14 10:49:07 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
That is a good poem. You might think about joining a website called allpoetry.com. They all put out poetry and get responses, comments and applause for their poems.
2007-12-14 09:00:48 · answer #3 · answered by Pebbles63 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I have enjoyed every single one of your poems that I have had the pleasure to read, TD. Great stuff. I am happy to see that this one continues in the grand tradition of your poetry.
Hey, would you go and look at the poem below please?
2007-12-14 09:36:56 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Honestly, i have got no knowledge about what you are talking about regarding these ghosts. However, i still very much enjoy reading this particular piece as you have a very excellent narrative skills, my friend! =)
2007-12-14 09:02:14 · answer #5 · answered by Dark Dickinsonian 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Good poem!!!
I can see and hear this being sung as a ballad in a smokey pub in England or Scotland, or Ireland!!!!
Onward!!!
Elysabeth
2007-12-14 10:10:52 · answer #6 · answered by Elysabeth 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I am totally captivated I could listen all day.
2007-12-14 09:39:04 · answer #7 · answered by ? 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You have such a gift for telling stories.
Go on, on, on and on.
2007-12-14 09:00:06 · answer #8 · answered by Lady Annabella-VInylist 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
How many new poems do you have?
2007-12-14 10:06:32 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
great!!!
2007-12-14 08:56:38 · answer #10 · answered by King 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋