Can you give to me your poetic comments?

Question

"The pleasurable sweetness of rhythmic sounds
Frees my soul from anchored ground."

I wish to thank you Sugar M and Missyj on the comments you have given to me thus far. I do have a question, if you are willing to answer, “Did these lines bring any thoughts or feelings to you? If they did, will you be willing to share what they were and why?

Peace,
Sam

PS: If you do not feel comfortable in responding on this open forum, please feel free to email me.
Sam.

Yes alongthetides,
I understand what it is you are saying.

Please take into consideration that when I say rhythmic sounds I am referring to more then just one sound.

I ask you this question, When you read this, what was the written imagery that you received?
Feel free to email me.
Sam

Answer 1

Beautifully put, these words immediately struck me as representing 'making love' and being carried away from the bonds of earth in its joys.

Answer 2

This is the beginning of poetic urge to write your inner feeling or the sense of inner spirit. Surely rhythmic sounds give cheer to the mind and heart and relieve oneself from stress and strain of life and work in this world. Without rhythm you cannot venture upon poem. It can be arranged in the poetic form like this;

Pleasurable sweetness of rhythmic sounds
Free my soul from anchored ground of deep sea
To forget myself of the world of woes
To the sound of music that elevates soul!

I think you have the potential of a poet to produce poems in profusion here afterwards. Put a suitable title to the above composition of poem, I say you have become a poet. All the Best!

Answer 3

These few words say much! to the personal self, wheather
reading or writing poetry. I once wrote it this way.
"Poetry's magic brings me in ward solace"

"When I write I drift into another place
a place I've been or want to go to see both anew
joyous times, memorable moments , familiar of long
ago or yet unseen drawn by rapture into fantasy of
twilight dreams , touched by blessed solace
in spite of me."
I wrote these words as part of a profile in the 90's.

you are so right "freed from anchored ground"

Answer 4

I love this, it's brilliant. Just a though but I think taking the plural s away from sounds would give it more of an impact.

Answer 5

On Earth, there are two kinds of sight.
Each shade, each texture signifies
A metaphor to fearless eyes-
More guarded ones turn and take flight.

Answer 6

"pleasurable" is generally not a good word for poetry. The meter is odd.

Answer 7

Luv it! Sounds like a good chorus hook in a song.

Answer 8

i think its beautiful

Answer 9

noo