will u rate my poem?

Question

Will u rate my poem?
Poem A

Sometimes I sit on a green top
Contemplating you'r existance in my life
Seems like I'm battling a lost cause
Constantly gazing into the galaxy
Full of fear, and the realization that nothing's real
Worthless doesn't even begin to describe me without you
Resorting to various escapes of reality
Always wondering if I'm good enough
To be just a star, in you'r universe.

Poem B

Why does society feel the need to judge?
Always wondering, is it me whose ****** up?
Accepting you're different isn't real
Are we not one in the same?
Living up to expectations is impossible
We always want to be the greatest
Which in retrospect, means we all fail
As a city, state, nation, and society, we fail.

Answer 1

I like them both a lot. Poem A is very honest and full of pain. It feels like you put a lot of yourself into it. Poem B is very insightful. I share a similar outlook on life. You are obviously a very talented writer. Keep it up.

Answer 2

Liked both, particularly for the honest feeling and awareness.

Would suggest reading "Climb the Highest Mountain," Mark Prophet,

"Men in White Apparel" and "Watch Your Dreams," Ann Ree Colton, and

"Expecting Adam," Martha Beck.

cordially,

j.

Answer 3

Both come across to me as honest and heart felt. A few lines could be improved upon so far as words chosen to describe, but that's just me. I think you're talented and have much to offer! Keep up the good work and try to get published!

Answer 4

Hope! Hope! Hope!
Delicious Hope! when naught to man it left - -
Of fortune destitute, of friends bereft;
When even his dog deserts him, and his goat
With tranquil disaffection chews his coat
While yet it hangs upon his back; then thou,
The star far-flaming on thine angel brow,
Descendest, radiant, from the skies to hint
The promise of a clerkship in the Mint.

People sow seeds with hope
And hope is the seed of life
People through ages hoped for eternity
Because hope is as great as eternity
Never give-up hope, never ever
Hope is your best mate, all the time
Even if all desert you unexpectedly
Hope will be with you, if you wish....

Answer 5

If you were not aware of fear or anything before you were born!
why do you dread going into oblivion once more,after you die?

Answer 6

I'm not qualified, but my response to your poems would be

A: 6/10
B: 7.5/10

Keep it going.

Answer 7

I don't like them. They are jarring and I do not want to feel like that.