Peom opinions please??

Question

Honest opinions please?
I've had people think I was depressed when they read this. I am not. This poem is about what I think could happen if we dont change our destructive ways, and soon
so please tell me what you think, if its not any good just say so! :D

The wheat has stopped waving
The air has grown thin
The waves of the ocean
Have stopped crashing in
The grass has grown dry
The Earth become cracked
The mountains are crumbling
No longer mighty or high

The trees have been broken
Their leaves turning in
The oceans are rising
The ice growing thin
The snow has all melted
The stars will not shine

We sat on our knees
Cryin’ please, oh please, oh please
What was done is now done
It cannot be changed
We never found love
We never lost hate
We never listened
To those who spoke out
And now here we sit
As the suns giving out

The winds blowing hard
Against the harsh desert plains
The animals were all shot
As they fled the dying land
The airs become thick
The suns been blocked out
The plants have all choked
& the sky is drawn out

The water is scarce
And poisoned at best
The great rushing rivers
Are drying out like the rest

The dying are dead
The starving went hungry
They never got fed
The diseases went rampant
The sickness went on
The hatred exploded
With the nuclear bombs

Yet here we are
Sitting on our knees
Crying out
Please, oh please, oh please
To the gods and the lords
To the unwitting leaders
Of the unwitting hordes
Waiting for what never was done
To get done

We never came together
We never saw the light
We never found peace
We never stopped the fight

We never listened to those who spoke out
And now here we sit
As the suns giving out.


Also, if you could star it that would be great, I would like as many opinions as I can get!!!
thanks!

Answer 1

Ok I "starred" you. Smile.

Aside from any "flaws" technically speaking, ( no offense) YOU should be, we all should be, depressed with regard to the "message" and how it most relates to realities in 2007, and far beyond. Certainly the context states clearly your feelings and opinions. Thank you.

"Not any good" suggests you have doubt,,,perhaps about the technical aspects of the piece??? Without question you shouldn't doubt the validity.

Final thoughts.

Einstein was once quoted as saying; "I don't know how we will "fight" WW3, but I know we will fight WW4 with sticks and stones."

We only "think" we live on an indestructable orb, beyond those things not in our control, such as Universal forces. What we seem apathetic about is what each of us contributes, not only to the demise of our, and other species, but to the ONLY "HOME" we have.

Among one of the other, perhaps more sad "truths" is that your ideal, dictates that it become a global consciousness, and generationally expanded over nearly 8 billion people. I find that an unlikely notion.

Steven Wolf
My Two Cents

Thank you for submitting

Answer 2

if you got suicidal tendencies and you're thinking about it then you see probably no way out but there's a light in the end of a tunnel. God is the light. He loves you like noone else in the world and He wants you to be the happiest. If you do not want to live then nobody will help you. Do you think that's a great idea to kick the bucket in the bathroom by cutting your veins thinking about "Oh how selfish am I?" Believe it or not but think everything over and live a happy life with love and friendship! Do not do that!!!!

Answer 3

The idea, and the poem, are really good. However, you might want to try rewriting it in a more indirect fashion (with a ton of imagery and metaphors) to see if you like it better, or just to see what happens.

Answer 4

I like it your talented you should continue your gifted.

Answer 5

wow. your really good i thought it was great. you have a really good talent

Answer 6

(:. can i say i love it?