THE JOURNEY.
Clusters of clouds came by,
Leaving us each with a mark,
Shaking our world,
Weakening our senses.
Devils in disguise,
That’s what they are,
Poisoning my mind,
Torturing your heart.
Angel is what you are,
Hidden from my gaze,
As loyal as the moon,
As salient as the sun.
The rain is so merciless,
We swam to the shore,
Away from darkness,
Away from madness.
Shipwrecks left us ashore,
There we learnt many,
Of how to survive,
Of how to revive.
The journey is enriching.
Awakens my sleeping self,
Awakens me in agony,
Of an eventful journey…
2007-12-13 10:05:23 · 7 answers · asked by Dark Dickinsonian 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I can't critique your work anymore because I'm inside the thoughts. You know I love it. This one pushes and pulls and stops and goes so much that you want to pull the chord that makes the train stop.
2007-12-13 10:15:17 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 4⤊ 1⤋
MoonBelle you really have the juices flowing. I wish I could awaken that side of myself once again. I been so busy lately that side of me has closed down for a while. I write music and play in a band sometimes when we can get a chance, lately it hasn't been as much.
But your work is Most Beautiful.
2007-12-14 07:51:49 · answer #2 · answered by ? 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very nice.
I wish I could contribute to the poetry section. I'm creative with my hands, not my words.
2007-12-13 18:58:01 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I really like the angel-devil and moon-sun comparisons. They elicit images in the mind and heart of the reader.
2007-12-13 18:10:49 · answer #4 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 4⤊ 1⤋
Very nice, Moonbelle, very nice indeed. Thank you for sharing it with us all.
2007-12-13 18:17:15 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 1⤋
yup yup very nice
2007-12-14 22:29:59 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Come to both of us...
2007-12-13 19:30:14 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋