dancing with the devil
I've made love to sweet Lilith fair,
And danced to a zombies trance.
Run my fingers through Lucifers hair,
And broken his deadly advance.
I'm still alive, yet somehow I am dead,
Awake, yet completely I'm sound asleep.
I scream for help, but feel nothing but dread,
Now begnning to whimper and weep.
The hotter the fire, the greater the lust,
I break away and think that I am free.
But slowly I am turrning to dust,
The payment on which we agreed.
The quiet is shattered by my sceam
I gasp for air and clutch at my throat.
No this is no some childish dream,
Satan stands with that terrible note.
He looks at me as if I'm a chiild,
And laughs as I try to bargain.
I've been put away locked and filed,
I'm now just part of his garden.
2007-12-13 09:20:35 · 8 answers · asked by The Dark Prince 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Your fingers must be pens and your heart paper. Simply because your emotions flow from you and permeate the world with their brilliance.
2007-12-13 12:04:46 · answer #1 · answered by Semp-listic! 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
What a sensational poem this is and i loved every word you have wrote for this poem ..-it is so descriptive that i can smell the devils heat and see the zombies dancing by the fire,It is a great poem and quite chilling how it all comes together,I am always so impressed with the poems and the words which you put it all together'with and it's like i can see and smell the whole poem scene for scene,,Baby what a great talent you have ,,well done ,, Shelly
2007-12-13 11:01:51 · answer #2 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is truly wonderful. I've loved the first version as well, I remember the first stanza, the image of Lilith and Lucifer and the zombies. The last stanza, about Satan's garden, is out of this world.
2007-12-14 01:54:44 · answer #3 · answered by Analyst 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It has a wonderful rhythm. It would make an exceptional song to be used as background for a horror movie. I wish you'd try to market it. I can just hear the drumbeats and the music as I read this great poem.
2007-12-13 10:24:37 · answer #4 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ok, I've noticed quite a few dark poems on here quite recently. is it something to do with the weather that get people thinking dark thoughts? regardless tho, i liked it.
2007-12-13 09:55:18 · answer #5 · answered by snowflakes 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
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2016-12-17 17:18:43 · answer #6 · answered by behl 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think it is quite wonderful and you did a very good job...
2007-12-13 11:39:05 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
And your question was?
2007-12-13 09:54:36 · answer #8 · answered by Maureen F 3 · 1⤊ 2⤋