As an aspiring _____ University student, I have experience, purpose, and open-mindedness.
if it doesn't make sense, help me make sense out of it :D
hehee. i'm helping someone revise their essay and i wasn't too sure :D
2007-12-13 07:56:21 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
i'd like to point out that open-mindedness is in fact a word :D
2007-12-13 08:20:32 · update #1
_____ = i just didn't want to include the University she's applying to...for privacy reasons :D
2007-12-13 08:21:11 · update #2
this is supposed to be her thesis statement...i don't know...i wasn't listening when she was explaining...
2007-12-13 08:22:01 · update #3
No, it doesn't make much sense. Unfortunately, without more information I'd have a hard time making it make sense. The way it reads now you seem to be saying that 'you have experience, purpose, and open-mindedness as an aspiring '' '' University student.
Perhaps what you are meaning to state is: "The experience I've gained through the purpose-driven programs I've actively participated in and helped to develop has encouraged me to become more open-minded. This, I feel, will allow me to be a student who whole-heartedly embraces the challenges "X" University offers in the areas I am interested in."
This, of course, is very generic but it might help.
2007-12-13 08:08:27 · answer #1 · answered by troyural 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Instead of open-mindedness (which by the way isn't a word) it should say As an aspiring _____ University student, I have experience, purpose, and an open mind in (whatever subject you are writing about.)
2007-12-13 08:00:26 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, what it means to me is:
I have a lot of experience, purpose and open-mindedness about aspiring to go to ____ University.
Probably the person wants to say:
Among the qualities that would make me a good __ University student are my sense of purpose and my open-mindedness [why am I the only one who likes that word?]. In addition, I have experience at (what?)
2007-12-13 08:24:56 · answer #3 · answered by Goddess of Grammar 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is a complete thought, but I agree with others who say "open-minded" is better.
The sentence readies the reader for an explanation and examples of experience, purpose and an open mind.
2007-12-13 08:06:43 · answer #4 · answered by brenbon1 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, yes, it makes sense, but I would say something like:
I am an open-minded, experienced, purposeful individual, aspiring to be a university student.
2007-12-13 08:01:36 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
To do what? It should read "As an aspiring ____________ University student, I have the experience, purpose and open mind to (do something).
It's an incomplete thought.
2007-12-13 08:00:02 · answer #6 · answered by oscarthegrouch 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is not fairly maximum appropriate... How approximately this: a million.) i will experience that this company might grant exciting, and difficult opportunities. or: 2.) i will experience that this company might grant difficult, yet exciting, opportunities. the 1st sentence gadgets up exciting and difficult as positives that circulate mutually. the 2nd sentence has a sprint greater drama via putting difficult first (the be conscious is value independent -- some annoying circumstances are solid, some undesirable), and then contrasting with yet exciting (which shows you already know the helpful skill of undertaking, and welcome it.)
2016-11-26 20:39:07 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
To do what? I have experience, purpose, and an open mind which will support my efforts to ...............
2007-12-13 08:00:38 · answer #8 · answered by sandwest 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋