Poetry help please?

Question

How do you like it? Compliments/critiques please.

Music used to be about rhythm and originality
Politics, crisis and topicality
Now it's fake, whiney, popularized junk,
A mix of "gorexcore" and pop punk
At times I find it hard to not be satirical
Seeing these kids saying they are lyrical
It's not even about the music, just the "scene"
Like N'Sync half the fan base is in their teens
Yet sometimes I can't help but feel bad for the bands
Their entire careers in these attention whores hands
They say they are sad to the people they know
"You may be depressed, but I am emo!"

Answer 1

It works, certainly as a blatantly honest statement about the state and condition of "Music" today; however it doesn't take into account generational moods; attitudes; and that even Music evolves to suit.

I like it most because I'm "old school"; but acceptance, tolerance, even modest compromise, is something every species has to endure in a survival method.

The good news, albeit abstract; is that music, like paint, can and will be painted over, recycled, and as Carly Simon once sang; analogizing....."It's coming around again."

Steven Wolf

Answer 2

Great poem! A few thinks you may think about changing, it loses it's strength when you use the words 'fake and whiny' try change those two words. And the ending...'you may be depressed but I am emo..." not a strong ending either add a line or switch up your wording a little bit.

Love the message, great writing!

Answer 3

I like it, witty and clever, a great turn of phrase in the the secong line, well done, owver I would try and use more concise wording in future.

Answer 4

do u want me to rate this interesting? it is actually great, did u write it? i liked it looks like u r creative!!!
try to put elaborate ur imaginative vocabulary and u will be shakespeare of 2008!!!!!!!!!!

Answer 5

it's pretty good, if only i could understand it a little better.

Answer 6

nice, mod one.