I wrote this about those people who lost their lives in the colorado shooting at the mall. this is for them and their families.
"Innocent Victims"
Turn on your t.v.
look at the news
a shooting in the mall
in Colorado
some freak kid
shooting innocent victims
what drove him to this??
poor people
they did nothing to deserve this
as they run for help
they had no chance
of escaping their murder
now the whole world
is hurt including me
killing innocent people
does not solve anything
that boy killed
someones brother,sister,boyfriend,girlfriend
and for what?
these people are never
going to come back
but God will
make them angels at the
Golden Gates of Heaven
2007-12-12 10:34:49 · 5 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
great
2007-12-12 10:37:30 · answer #1 · answered by die for poetry 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Everyone on this planet, (except perhaps a few crazy people), feels the same shock and outrage over the young man's actions. But what's the point of re-stating the obvious? Tell us something we DON'T know about it. Help us understand why he did it, or make us feel more deeply, the pain of the people who experienced it first-hand. In other words, dig a little deeper into this subject than the commonplace reactions.
2007-12-12 18:52:16 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
this isn't a poem it is statement that might be put somewhere as recignition of what happened to them but its not a poem. a poem has rhythm and a flow this just doesn't have that. I'm not saying it isn't nice or heartfelt but you cant call it a poem
2007-12-12 18:41:05 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I agree with Elaine P!
2007-12-12 21:06:51 · answer #4 · answered by Яɑɩɳɓɵw 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's very heartfelt. Keep writing, don't let anyone discourage you.
2007-12-12 18:46:42 · answer #5 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋