If you guys think it's any good, then I will show it to her... If not, well then I will burn it.
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First Cosmonaut on The Moon
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Each tiny step forward for her is a leap for my heart
I feel like first man on the Moon, as if we will never grow apart
Since meeting her I am walking around with my head in the clouds
I am laughing out loud at gravity’s struggle to slow me down
Cold surface of jagged rock that used to be my soul
Like the sun melting ice her smile made me warm
Someone like her, oh so sweet is not so easy to find
She often makes me feel like I’m losing my mind
I am falling for her… Ever deeper. Vacuum of space envelopes me
But her little voice I hear and I know there’s nothing to fear
She is so far away now but I can always reach out
See that smiling face and know Moonbelle, my true love.
2007-12-12 06:15:39 · 17 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Hahahahahaha... Annabelle, you spelled "Retarded Russian" wrong.! I can't fix it at this point though... I need to learn to reread the stuff I post before I post it...
2007-12-12 09:46:40 · update #1
Thanks honey for writing this...it's very creative but a lil bit crazy and out of order. but it's ok it just shows how crazy you are to me!!! hehee.
...and thanks everyone for being so supportive. Love you all... =)
2007-12-12 10:13:29 · answer #1 · answered by Dark Dickinsonian 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Yes, she may very well like you. Girls generally don't talk to people they don't like. #2, 3, & 4 make me think that she is interested in having you as a friend, and probably not as anything else. Just keep being nice and don't give her too many more poems and things may turn into something more.
2016-05-23 06:00:49 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice work, I only found one thing a missing word (the)
"I feel like (the) first man on the Moon."
Other then that little word being missing, I found this to be very sincere & very deep. Sure sounds like you've got it bad... No worries I'm sure she'll love it as she loves you.
Best of wishes for you both.
Moonbelle or as Dino would say "Bella chella' Luna" translated in Italian it means ( Beautiful one of the moon ) makes a perfect ending.
2007-12-12 07:43:06 · answer #3 · answered by Chef April 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Good job! SHow it to her by all means. I'm weak in the knees myself (in an exercise like this I always insert my own name to get a better feel for one's reaction).
2007-12-12 06:41:41 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
DUDE! You gots it bad! The poem is very nice, full of great images. Some girl might really like it...
2007-12-12 07:11:56 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
Hey! Ease up, Stoogie! You know I'm diabetic and that was just too sweet.
2007-12-12 07:03:12 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
I really like! It sounds like you really put a lot of time into and thats something you can tell as you're reading it, and she'll be able to tell. I know she'll love it! If you don't give it to her, I think you're stupid! haha
2007-12-12 06:25:39 · answer #7 · answered by Ambie_Amb 1 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Dude, besides your comedy, you are also a poet and didn't know it. Very good. I think ol' Moonbelle will love it.
2007-12-12 07:11:43 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's nice Stooge. Great title by the way.
2007-12-12 06:28:13 · answer #9 · answered by Todd 7 · 4⤊ 0⤋
I really like it, it's very creative, but just to be on the safe side i would sling shot it to her, in case she doesn't like it and wants to hurt you for stalking her.
JUST A SUGGESTION!!!!
2007-12-13 07:53:01 · answer #10 · answered by HEARTBOUND♥ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
our thoughts next to a line.,
in our mouth and mind, is things we try to find
but think normal people exist we must have just missed
2007-12-12 12:07:49 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋