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Question

I wrote a character analysis on Gilgamesh. Can you correct the tenses and grammer?

Unlike today, a ruler in the time of Gilgamesh was considered to be divine and was responsible for maintaining good relations with the gods. He is two-thirds god and one-third man but is still mortal In the beginning, he is egotistical, strong, a bad king, and has no morals when it comes to the treatment of his people. He rapes women and beats men but he learns about responsibility through the death of Enkidu and his journey for eternal life. He builds the great walls of Uruk and builds a temple, both of which are acts positively affecting the lives of his people.

Answer 1

A ruler in the time of Gilgamesh (unlike today) was considered to be divine and was responsible for maintaining good relations with the gods. Gilgamesh is two-thirds god and one-third man but is still mortal. In the beginning, he is a bad king--egotistical, strong, and without morals when it comes to the treatment of his people. He rapes women and beats men, but he learns about responsibility through the death of Enkidu and his quest for eternal life. He builds the great walls of Uruk and builds a temple, both of which are acts positively affecting the lives of his people.

What you wrote required just a small amount of revision. However, you might add that when he died, his people (who at the beginning had prayed to the gods to get him off their backs) mourned for him. Evidently after he gave up his quest and went home, he devoted himself to being a much better king than he had originally been. Your last sentence implies as much, but you might say it a little more explicitly.

Answer 2

Unlike today, a ruler in the time of Gilgamesh were considered to be divine and were responsible for maintaining good relations with the gods. He is two-thirds god and one-third man but is still mortal. In the beginning, he is egotistical, strong, a bad king, and has no morals when it comes to the treatment of his people. He rapes women and beats men but he learns about responsibility through the death of Enkidu and his journey for eternal life. He builds the great walls of Uruk and builds a temple, both of which are acts positively affecting the lives of his people.

Answer 3

Unlike today, a ruler in the time of Gilgamesh was considered to be divine and was responsible for maintaining good relations with the gods. He is two-thirds god and one-third man but is still mortal in the beginning. He is egotistical, strong, a bad king, and has no morals when it comes to the treatment of his people, raping women and beating men. Through the death of Enkidu and his journey for eternal life he learns about responsibility . The King builds the great walls of Uruk and a temple, both of which are acts positively affecting the lives of his people.

Answer 4

Unlike today, a rule in the time of Gilgamesh was considered to be divine. He was responsible for maintaining good relations with the gods. He is two-thirds god and one-third man but he still have to experience the bitter taste of mortality. In the beginning, he is egotistical, strong, a bad king, and has no morals when it comes to the treatment of his people. He rapes women and beats men, but he learns about responsibility through the death of Enkidu and his journey for eternal life. He built the great walls of Uruk and a temple. Both of which are acts of kindness changing the lives of his people.

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Answer 5

Here you go .. I would do it this way ..

Unlike today, a ruler in the time of Gilgamesh was considered divine, and was responsible for maintaining good relations with the gods. He was two-thirds god and one-third man but was still mortal . In the beginning, he was egotistical, strong, a bad king, and had no morals about the treatment of his people. He raped women and beat men but he learned about responsibility through the death of Enkidu and his journey for eternal life. He built the great walls of Uruk and a temple, both of which positively affected the lives of his people.

NOTE: Instead of saying "he" all the time, is there a name you should use the first time you say "he" and maybe again later in the paragraph?

Answer 6

run-on sentences.too long -too many commas