Kleenex Kids
Chalky seashell
Off the subtle sands
Of Cape Anne
Sings a silent song
A graceful mare
Laboring for you,
Heedless child
Of Rhode Island Sun
A degree
A deep prodding
Jetliners
Fashion deaths
Fine cheeses
From Morocco
And Venezuela
Dropped at your feet
Plucked from cows
Used for fine meats
2007-12-12 02:11:53 · 18 answers · asked by Chara Pointshot 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Its quite bad actually! do you hate her?
2007-12-12 02:15:04 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Each Morn a thousand Roses brings, you say:
Yes, but where leaves the Rose of Yesterday?
And this first summer month brings the Rose
Shall take Jamshyd and Kaikobad away.
2007-12-12 15:15:14 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hummm...Art should never be labled "good/bad"...but if you really want the reader to understand that you have a specific topic...you may want to try shooting for a little more consistancy.
2007-12-12 10:18:20 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad. It has lots of tasty visuals, but there's not a lot of theme or mood for us to latch onto.
2007-12-12 10:15:36 · answer #4 · answered by thatpirategirl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the only one who would really understand the depth of this poem is yourself and that's is what matters :0)
2007-12-12 10:44:45 · answer #5 · answered by this account is no longer in use 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Uhh... nice poem. Too abstract lol
2007-12-12 10:15:28 · answer #6 · answered by julosh9999 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Ah! You begin your question with 'how bad...."
That's the ONLY thing wrong with this.......
Alliteration to be savored!!! Refreshing, new images abound!!!
GOOD poem...NOT bad!!!
Elysabeth Faslund...poemhunter
2007-12-12 10:43:31 · answer #7 · answered by Elysabeth 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It didn't make any sense to me, but I am not familiar with your ex girlfriend's liifestyle.
2007-12-12 10:15:11 · answer #8 · answered by Harley Lady 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
umm i am not really into poetry so depending on your audience, i personally wouldn't read this and wouldn't use it. Weird.
2007-12-12 10:14:49 · answer #9 · answered by ChristinaS 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its okay. But needs work.
you need to make it more clear to the audiance.
2007-12-12 11:14:38 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋