Never
Is it the end ?
how can it be , it's so unfair
y everythin gotta end this way
If it has to ......
never wil i breath this way
never will i sing my way
never will i smile , never will i trust
Is it really ending ?
My belief's going strong
everythin's so wrong.......
never will i stand beside the window ....watching the birds fly
never will i tell smone how much it pains deep inside
never ...never
bt the thing is dus nythin last forever
may be ....may be not
bt m seeing it all end this way
i promise....
never will i listen to this heartbeat
never will i see those eyes in mirror
never will i open my eyes agen
never ....never ...meaning never
2007-12-11 20:32:57 · 16 answers · asked by *purple world* 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
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2007-12-11 20:36:04 · answer #1 · answered by Ed B 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
6
2007-12-12 04:38:39 · answer #2 · answered by sweetie29 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
8/10
2007-12-12 04:35:29 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I see that you have made many gramatical mistakes . I like the last line it is very catchy. you can try changing the line never will i to i will never and can i listen to my heart beat. my heart states yes but the ancient thinkers say no they know it is the end. y do my believs go wrong?they are so strong....
will I be able to ....... no I will never be able to never... never ...
I hate to brake it but
it is all about to shut
the end is nere
but why has it come here
never ....
this will do your pooem some good. youcan give it the "why is the end here"
my overall rating's would be 6/10
2007-12-12 04:49:42 · answer #4 · answered by Birkaran S 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Don't be sad and pessimistic. What is nothing lasts. What if you and I may not last but we will try to live every moment of our life till the end and enjoy before death take us away.
2007-12-12 04:38:32 · answer #5 · answered by Mahesh R 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Know what?It's nice...8/10 for me..I suggest put some melody and rhythm to the poem and it will be a very good song.:)
2007-12-12 04:36:22 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice!you have talent!...the only problem is a few spelling mistakes but that does'nt matter....much.;p... Anyways, honestly speaking, I found it slightly depressing(but it was cool-dont worry!) but I'm sure many others will like it... Can you sing?Ever considered turning this into a rock song or something?anyways...keep writing n dont give up!I rate this 7.5/10 :)
2007-12-14 12:21:29 · answer #7 · answered by dg04 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good. I like it. 7/10
2007-12-12 04:35:26 · answer #8 · answered by Moonwitch 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Too many spelling errors for me to enjoy this. That preview page is there for a reason.
2007-12-12 04:35:55 · answer #9 · answered by Derrick Q 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it sounds very sad. try talking to a close friend, family member, or counselor about your feelings. Especially if you
have any thoughts of suicide.
Talk it out.
2007-12-12 04:37:42 · answer #10 · answered by bob 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
8/10 I really like ur puestion
2007-12-14 15:18:58 · answer #11 · answered by Amy B 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋