PLEASE help me I'm writing a poem about the beach PLEASE HELP ME?

Question

ok so i have to write this poem about the beach and Describing the beach like the sounds , smell , feeling , the view . this is what i have started

"As I walk along the beach, The sun against my face, Feels every bit as sweet. Looking across the sea It seems endless , And only the sound, Of the seagulls on high on a beach, I’ sitting on the floor with sand in my toes, And the wind, In my hair. Looking at the beautiful sun set it is just a puse of perfection , as my friends come over we look across the blue sea . We get into the warm waters of the sea all u can hear is girls shouting and the waves crashing together.

As the day go we see the sun set oh how beautiful it is with all its blended colors , orange , blue , and purple. We all start a fire and our other friends come around together , the fire is so red and the smell of the wood burning

can u please give me more ideas of what else i can write

Answer 1

Smiles; certainly a very personal; enjoyable experience. I hope you won't take offense but I'm going to copy/paste/edit in my suggestions. You truly don't NEED more though. Forgive this if I offend.
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I walk along "A" beach; with the warmth of the Sun caressing my face; as do the Sea breezes, and it all feels every bit as sweet, as my fondest memory.

Looking out the sea seems endless; and blends with the sky; creating the illusion that there is no horizon.

I'm aware of the sounds of the surf; but too, the insistant calling of seagulls hovering over me.

I sit; digging my toes into the warm, wet sand; face up; feeling the wind in my hair.

As the Sun sets I muse it as perfection, and it causes friends to gather close to sit; catching the final rays in awe.

"Enough" I say; "Let's get wet," and we all run at once; into the surf; splashing and kicking at the foam.

The sounds we make; us girls; nearly drown out the "volume" of the crashing waves.

We see the last Orange slice falling behind the horizon now; taking with it the colors of daylight, and return to our places to view the spectacle

Recreating that warmth seems to be our next order of business; in part to sustain it; not abandon "IT" or each other.

Scattering and gathering we all bring fuel to a fire on that beach; once again bringing us together.

Sticks turned to ash; pop in the flames. Colors dance; rising to the night sky. Fragrances mingle of salt and sweet, in the smoke.

As embers burn from Yellows and Reds we sense so much more of us united.
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Just my two cents.

Steven Wolf

Answer 2

Right now you don't have a poem, you have prose. Poetry is written in verse, not paragraphs. However, dividing your paragraph into lines doesn't automatically make this a poem. You need to include things like metaphors, similies, alliteration, assonance, dissonance, rhyme, rhythm and more to create a poem.

Try to use words that have a sound which describe the mood of the poem, for example:

White-crested waves wash upon spotless sand

The W and S sounds at the beginning of the words in the sentence create a calm, almost a "whishing" sound like waves on a beach. You can use the sounds of the words to describe the sounds in the poem. This particular use is called alliteration.

You can also use images in your poem to describe the things you see at the beach:

A seagull floats on the wandering waves,
Like a sailboat lost in the ocean's embrace

This is a similie, which is a comparison using the words 'like or as'.

Anyway, that's all I have time to cover for now. Experiment with these sorts of things and you'll find that soon enough you'll have an A++ poem on your paper.

Answer 3

Poem can only be composed very easily if you compare with some other important event then it can be present more logically and more lively.

Answer 4

write about what other people are doing and the looks on their faces