into school and ask my music teacher to help me write music to, but I'm a bit embaressed incase its rubbish!! please help!x
2007-12-11 07:25:21 · 41 answers · asked by ωєℓѕн 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music ➔ Other - Music
Oh Life it has so many beautiful moments,
Two as one and life alone,
Our dreams they have so many different endings,
Thinking of them now I hope thats how we live,
No my love is so deep I'm not living,
You are holding my heart in your hands,
I'm closest I've been to admitting,
All I want is you forever,
But in my life the people that have hurt me,
Are the ones I thought that cared,
Oh but love it's such a different feeling,
And my heart belongs to you,
So hear me sing,
As I talk of life without you,
I could never be untrue, because I find it hard to believe,
You could never be in love,
To cause someone that much pain,
And oh yeah you are holding my heart in your hands,
And I'm the closest I've been to believing,
This is my life forever.
Oh stars they have so many constellations,
Shining bright, and lighting nights,
My heart is feels like a star in the seasons,
Bright as fire but cold as ice,
No my mind is so lost I'm so mislead,
You are holding my life in
2007-12-11 07:26:18 · update #1
your hands,
I'm the closest I've been to believing,
This could be us forever,
Oh but life is full of friends and love and laughter,
Whats do I need with all the pain,
Oh but love it wins them all in fear and hatred,
And my life belongs to you,
Oh yeah I'm the most certain I've been to admitting,
I am yours forever, oh yeah this is my life forever,
Our forever love.
2007-12-11 07:27:35 · update #2
Its pretty good - however
A lot of people don't like when young teens sing about love and heartbreak - it usually sounds fake because not many teens have experienced true love and heartbreak. Please, songs about love are wayyyy cliche.
2007-12-11 07:29:41 · answer #1 · answered by Trevor M 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Excellent job. Well done. You have real talent. It is far from rubbish. Much better than many songs that have been quite successful.
Talk to your teacher. All the talent and ability in the world will not buy you a cup of tea if you do not have the courage to pursue it! Success in the music business takes talent and determination. Remember the saying: success is on tenth inspiration and nine tenths perspiration!
Merry Christmas!
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2007-12-11 07:32:20 · answer #2 · answered by Jacob W 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It`s certainly NOT rubbish.I`m sure your music teacher will tell you the same.I wish I could have written lyrics like that when I was 13.If you are expressing your own feelings in this song then go for it.There is nothing rubbish about writing like this so don`t be embarassed.You obviously have a talent.Use it and don`t let anyone stop you.You never know where it might lead.
2007-12-11 09:10:59 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Coming from a fellow songwriter, you have a lot of good lyrics in there! But they don't all flow well, and don't all make sense together. You definitely have something there, but think about what you want your song to be about, want you want it to say to people, and then go from there, pick out the things that don't need to be there, and save them for later because every line was wonderful, just didn't all belong in one song.
2007-12-11 07:29:46 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
APPLAUSE, APPLAUSE!!! I can't believe you are only 13 years old. Wow! That verse is great romantic stuff. Yes send it to your teacher but not as a music piece it is too long. As a poem tone it ranks high and you must continue your work, you have talent.....Oh yes, the only mistype is in the last paragraph,"...is (it) " In the third line before you added to it.
Spartawo...
2007-12-11 07:48:25 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
great lyrics ... you could make money out of this... .Make sure to get it into music form make several copies of this music on paper ... Mail a signed copy of it to yourself and never open the envelop... This is cheap copyright. If anyone steals your music .. you have a proof with the post office stamp saying the date you made it etc.... good luck
2007-12-11 07:33:26 · answer #6 · answered by CC 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Kid. I'm going to be honest with you. I can tell immediately you're not the smartest knife in the drawer.
See I'm guessing you didn't copyright this. Anyone now can steal this and pose it as their own because you laid no legal claim to it. If you want honest opinions ask your teachers, it's why they're there.
I don't want to see you get in trouble but damn.
2007-12-11 07:30:08 · answer #7 · answered by Chris 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think this is a beautiful song! your very talented :D I've also writen some songs myself ^^Don't be embarressed, Bring your song to your music teacher to help you with the music.
2007-12-11 07:31:42 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yeah, if your into that type of song I guess. I'm not so can't give much of an opinion. Maybe you should join up w/ Hannah, lol =)
2007-12-11 07:31:24 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
looks good.
good luck with the music teacher. Maybe if you dont want to be embrassed email it to her or go before or after school or durring lunch time
2007-12-11 07:28:25 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋