I!
I can feel the anger flowing right through me!
Why?
Why does the anger seem to abuse me?
Hate!
Hate and control the only things I know!
Wait!
Wait just a minute, I'm about to explode!
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (hating waiting fadeing baiting)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (seeding needing dreaming screaming)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (trying crying flying dying)
I can't take this!
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (hating waiting fadeing baiting)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (seeding needing dreaming screaming)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (trying crying flying dying)
I can't make this!
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (hating waiting fadeing baiting)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (seeding needing dreaming screaming)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (trying crying flying dying)
Must erase this!
I hate, why wait?
Why hate? I wait!
All!
All fan the f
2007-12-11 00:22:25 · 5 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
lames that burm me inside!
Through!
Through all the fire I see a silhouette rise!
Hide!
Hide in the masses, blend in to them all!
Lies!
Lies are the mortar in society's brick wall!
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (hating waiting fadeing baiting)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (seeding needing dreaming screaming)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (trying crying flying dying)
I can't take this!
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (hating waiting fadeing baiting)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (seeding needing dreaming screaming)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (trying crying flying dying)
I can't make this!
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (hating waiting fadeing baiting)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (seeding needing dreaming screaming)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (trying crying flying dying)
Must erase this!
All hide through lies.
Hide through all lies!
Can you live wit
2007-12-11 00:23:16 · update #1
h the monster inside? (Try to conceal!)
Can you feel the monster looking through your eye? (Pretend not to feel!)
I can see through the mask that you wear! (Try as you might!)
I see the face inside the blank stare! (It's there in spite!)
Apathy!
Epitome!
Travesty!
Society!
You!
You must make a choice, and make it right now!
Stand!
Stand on your feet, refuse now to bow!
Must!
Must the attitude of all life be this?
Up!
Up to the sky, pump all the fists!
2007-12-11 00:24:02 · update #2
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (hating waiting fadeing baiting)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (seeding needing dreaming screaming)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (trying crying flying dying)
I can't take this!
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (hating waiting fadeing baiting)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (seeding needing dreaming screaming)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (trying crying flying dying)
I can't make this!
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (hating waiting fadeing baiting)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (seeding needing dreaming screaming)
I feel the hate flowing through my veins! (trying crying flying dying)
You must stand up!
2007-12-11 00:24:18 · update #3
Hey everyone, I'm sorry for the misspellings... I didn't notice fadeing until I posted it, thanks to copy and paste. Other than that I would like some honest feedback.
2007-12-11 00:43:55 · update #4
Good opinions so far.... You guys are all pretty close to my inspiration. Well, except for jahaan. Kinda a swing and a miss...
2007-12-11 02:59:27 · update #5
With all due respect I hoped this was cathartic for you; theraputic; and a method of "releasing"?
On a personal level; work like this; for me; would have to be a Funeral of sorts; in a metaphorical sense. To carry that weight, a long time (Beatles) seems as though it would be severely debilitating.
Obvious to me at least, (no offense) is the use of the word "Hate." Certainly a more powerful word than "Love", but it is powerful enough that you might have cut back it's useage. Obviously you intended it for "Emphasis"
Generally speaking; good flow; and word useage.
Steven Wolf
2007-12-11 00:46:06 · answer #1 · answered by DIY Doc 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well written, poised and relaxed, a tad subjegated, however the flow works well, I like the fact that you pour the emotion into your work's, nice shock factor and a reality that parrall's nicely with the fictional aspect of the work, well done.
2007-12-11 00:39:14 · answer #2 · answered by kissaled 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is really emotional, and seems honest. I like it (as long as its not pseudo-angst)
It sounds like it could be the lyrics for a song (with the repitition for the chorus etc)
2007-12-11 01:17:03 · answer #3 · answered by kittykat_017 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
WOW!!! that is all i can say, i don't know why but this poem made me cry. once a poem can have that kind of effect on someone that means that your poem is perfect and is a masterpiece.
2007-12-11 06:12:03 · answer #4 · answered by HEARTBOUND♥ 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
you might be sitting alone in your room ,might be after a depressing day...now these word are what u unleashed...the anger is spilled...the uneasiness and a huge load of emotions is set free...good effort
2007-12-11 02:51:22 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋