This was the first poem I ever wrote.
I am not yet a woman
I am no a girl
I am not a teenager
So what am I?
I am independent
I am loyal
I am intelligent
I am shy
I plan on finishing collage
I am helpful
I do the best I can do
I choose what I do and when I do it
A good listener
I am able to be how I am inside
So who am I?
Am I a person in the crowd?
Or do I stand out
Who do you think I am?
Am I a she or a he?
Do I differ from you?
Am I the same?
I am the person inside
Is that how I am
Or am I living someone else life
What do you think?
Do think I am a brat
A know it all
Cheater on a test
Not responsible
Talks too much and does not listen
Does poorly all the time
If you think that then listen to me closely
2007-12-10 14:09:31 · 6 answers · asked by moonstonefrogs 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Continued...
I live my life the way I want
I learn from people
And their mistakes and mine
From the teachers that teach me a lot
I try my hardest
I am there when I need me and when people need me
I listen to people
Still frustrated
I am a little of some of these things you may see me if you don’t study me
It’s what is on the inside that counts not the outside
So who am I?
That is for me to now and you to find out
2007-12-10 14:09:57 · update #1
Thanks Amy, Ashley, and Jenny!!!
If feels like I wrote it forever ago when it wasn't that long ago. I don't know if i'm ready to go back yet.
2007-12-10 14:40:05 · update #2
This was your first poem and you were just learning to express yourself in descriptive words. Nobody could do anything but applaud that effort. Every poet writes a first poem.
2007-12-10 14:33:32 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think you should plan on finishing "college".
As an expression, it says all the confusing things that a human being feels and thinks. As a poet, it is expressed poorly.
Nevertheless, I strongly support you and suggest that you keep "expressing." Not all expression is publishable but it is a wonderful outlet. All expression has worth and value to the person who is pouring out their thoughts and feelings. That alone is worth its weight in gold!
Keep Writing.
2007-12-10 22:52:33 · answer #2 · answered by autumlovr 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
:( im sorry i dont really feel it to me it feels like it drags on forever for your first poem its okay for some people poetry just clicks at the start for others it takes a little practice and a few not so good first poemsit has potenial and the thought was there but it wasn't that good as a whole sorry but don't give up try try again
2007-12-11 22:03:49 · answer #3 · answered by *renfield* 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Ok for your first poem...it doesn't flow very well, but the content is quite good. I really like the last few lines. Keep it up! Good luck!
:)
2007-12-10 22:15:09 · answer #4 · answered by ashley_p89 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very good. Keep writing.
2007-12-11 03:30:40 · answer #5 · answered by Analyst 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a keeper to pick apart and work it over.
2007-12-10 22:33:10 · answer #6 · answered by jenny 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋