Did you see Elys's masterpeice?
This is a fixer upper of mine from last Summer.
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The steps taken
I take the first step
In the direction of good
…for a defenseless child
…absent, humanity
I take the second step
In the direction of guard
…for a fatherless family
…absent, accountability
I take the third step
In the direction of the flag
…for the fallen many
…absent, solidarity
I take the fourth step
In the direction of faith
…for a divine prophecy
…absent, humility
I take the fifth step
In the direction of reason
…for the question’s want
…absent, curiosity
I take the sixth step
In the direction of charity
…for all without hope
…absent, prosperity
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2007-12-10 09:51:36 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I think will be with me for a while...
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2007-12-10 09:53:50 · update #1
Well done. The repetition was effective, the flow & word usage keep me interested. Simple yet somehow profound. I dig it
Write on!!
Earth
2007-12-10 09:59:01 · answer #1 · answered by Earth the Poet 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I find this very effective and moving. The repetitive form only emphasizes each stanza's content to a greater degree. It's very clean and clear.
2007-12-10 10:34:54 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wow T,D.utterly fantastic to say the least I loved it and you did a wonderful job on all paragraphs.sorry i;m not a poet so i don't know what you call them but paragraph's....nice
2007-12-10 10:52:08 · answer #3 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wow, you get a star and a beer if you ever make it to Chicago
2007-12-10 10:15:54 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Yes, I commented on her poem some time ago. As for you, you're my hero.
2007-12-10 10:16:05 · answer #5 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
What can I say!
I best ?
2007-12-10 11:17:28 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋