ice
I'm looking at you
Yet I don't recognize you
What happened to us?
Your touch is like ice
So frozen that it consumes
The heat we once had
Try to remember
When did that flicker die out?
And leave us alone
Everytime I think
The answer slips through my mind
Slippery are you
Beating my head now
Whatever happened to love
Grown icy and cold
Were not meant to be
And that is o.k. with me
Remember my touch
2007-12-09 06:36:26 · 5 answers · asked by The Dark Prince 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Thank you for posting this up it's lovely and i think you didn't have to go through the trouble for doing this for me
2007-12-09 06:57:30 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 1⤋
Sorry, but it's really way too cliche. Ice, frozen and the heat - cliche all the way. Too common...
[edit today]
Ok, I think I was rather harsh yesterday. I thought I might add that your gesture is very nice.
2007-12-09 15:01:26 · answer #2 · answered by Analyst 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I loved this poem and love that you did it for Natalia for a birthday poem' you really are so sweet.,,I also love the darkness; that;s why your poetry is so wonderful ' a you do dark poetry ' and turn right around and do a haikoem style of poetry..I love and admire you and your work ....always here for you love Shelly
2007-12-09 15:27:18 · answer #3 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
What a great job and gesture from a great man to a great girl!
2007-12-09 15:38:45 · answer #4 · answered by Semp-listic! 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
wow,, great job.. and happy birthday Naila!!!
2007-12-09 20:23:52 · answer #5 · answered by dragonflyy 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋