What do you think of this poem?

Question

Pornography
Written By Semper Fi Reborn

He was seen as a strong man,
Yet inside he was weak.
He was enslaved in chains,
By the pleasures he'd seek.

The video store,
Had become his church.
A quest for perversion,
His daily search.

He'd pop in a movie,
And watch with glee.
The sickness and filth,
Upon his TV.

Never realizing at all,
He was being changed.
The way he viewed women,
Had itself derranged.

He sought out the company,
Of prostitutes.
Cheap affairs,
Quick rendevouz.

All because,
Many can never see.
The damages done,
By pornography.

Answer 1

Brethren, I just got ONE thing to say!

I wish the hail that porn would be wiped off the face of this map.
So someday maybe it can be wiped from people's mind.
That is one way
Satan wins the day
He bounds people
To that chain
I don't give a flip
If someone wants to spin me around
And call me a beech
I won't be with a man
Who has porn in his life
If he cannot appreciate me
Fully and thoroughly
And has eyes and heart and mind and soul
That only has my name written on them
Shall he then
Depart from me!
And flip him
And skip him
I'll be on my way
Because I will not
Compete with other women
For his affections
Even the ones he does not know personally
For dad dang it I may not be physically beautiful
But I do plenty of making up
By what's in my heart.
For dad dang it I'm HUMAN
Not no slave
Not no piece of meat
Not no robot
I'm not any of those three
I'm HUMAN
To be respected as EQUAL partner and gender
Shall it be wiped
From the face of this earth
Because all it's pleasure
Ain' nothin' worthwhile
The baggage it brings!
Once it gets a hold of you
It's THAAAAT much harder
To break from the ball and chain
But with God
And enough effort on one's part
Self control can be restored stronger than ever
And chain and ball no more!

Brethren, I once heard a survey was conducted with men and 35% admitted that if rape was not illegal, they'll go raping. Talk about one aspect of the damage porn does!

Answer 2

Semper, as usual honey, truer words have never been spoken. You always manage to touch me in a way that few can. The wants of the flesh rule the word along with so many other things, it is a constant battle, even for the most God fearing people. We all know that Satan will use what ever means he can to trip us up. Your poem should be a wake up call for many.

Answer 3

For me a poem has to have rhythm. It doesn't necessarily have to rhyme but it needs to hit my emotions. I think clarity of expression is important as well. I don't like to second guess what I'm reading about. I always look for what I term "poetic gems"in the text.

Answer 4

I think you did really good and you picked a subject that concerns us all in one way or another.
I am told I expect too much by saying I would not be with a man who has pornography videos, magazines or anything else like it. To me, it is degrading and has no place in a relationship.
I also think you are right about it changing how men see women.
Your poem is well written and honest.

Answer 5

Cleverly written and a good witness to anyone whose been down this path, is tempted or wants to know the reality.

Answer 6

As Single FATHER
With a DAUGHTER
And POETRY Writer TOO
It is so VERY VERY TRUE
FOR THIS POEM >>>> I THANK YOU<<<<

Answer 7

It's a very good poem, with a true and very sad message.

Answer 8

wow! really good, and soooooo true, lol. i kno alot of ppl that think nothin of it, they just pop the tape in and watch, but yea, actions stem off of watching porn and i dont think ppl even really notice.

Answer 9

That is really good. You are a good poetry writer. keep doing whatever you are doing. GREAT JOB!

Answer 10

that is so true and so wonderfully written thank you*