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ok so were supposed to write a poem for my class ,of how you feal tell me is this good?
Emotions frozen
In a dark cold shell
It keeps me from showing
What heart is set

It's like a spell
Which i cant escape
I've made a vow to you
I'll love you forever

This spell is mysterious
It inpowers me so
Devouring my very soul
Leaves me un-empty

The mist is starting to clear
And so is my heart
Now i know
This spell is love

Answer 1

I think you've expressed heart felt emotions. No one should be critical of anothers work,,,however; you might edit it for spelling. IE: Empowers me versus Inpowers? OR SEE BELOW... That block of words is a bit confusing.

Certainly "The spell is mysterious" is as it should be; considering that love is an irrational emotion.

"It inpowers me, devours my very soul, leaves me Un-empty; is the confusing phrase; in context. "OVER" powers you might be more relevant? "Consumes" my soul more gentle, and yet Fills or full fills me; rather than un-empty?

Just my two cents. The work is a good piece.

Steven Wolf