Earth-Woman*
I am woman and I have borne the Torah on a gold cloth
Over my shoulder.
I have consecrated its dust-leadened parchment,
Cradling the scrolls into temple darkness...
Clicked-shut the doors, saddened and empty.
I am of childbearing age...
I am crimson with life.
I have touched the Ark.
I have read the Covenant.
I cannot lighten the laws of heaven.
I have nothing to do with clouds or sin, but
I could have shown them where Eden was hidden...
The forgotten way going home again.
I have caressed the male god on his couch
In a ghost-haunted room, a candle-dark room...
Remembering a soul, but eyes with no spark.
I have soothed his forehead in the dead hours,
Softening his terror, silencing his scream,
'Mother, do not leave me again'.
I cannot replace the laws of heaven.
I have nothing to gain from angels or sin, but
I put him on the road to Eden...
The long-hidden path going home again.
I am woman and I come adorned with a
Mitre of thorns.
I own salvation, blessed and chaliced...
Giving to sinners,
Selling to saints.
I have witnessed the sins of gods.
I have dried the unwarranted tears of Eve.
I have confessed and absolved the dead.
I will not revise the laws of heaven.
I will not tamper with death or sin, but
I will wait for you in Eden...
At the end of the road going home again.
2007-12-08 11:47:00 · 17 answers · asked by Elysabeth 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I really like this it has so much meaning to it.
2007-12-08 12:15:09 · answer #1 · answered by glamour04111 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is wonderful.
I have caressed the male god on his couch
In a ghost-haunted room, a candle-dark room...
What truly excellent lines. It is such a captivating poetic narrative. It drew me in. I will read it many more times. These comments are more an expression of my appreciation than a critique at this point. I did want to give you the feedback though.
2007-12-10 15:23:50 · answer #2 · answered by Todd 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
This is one of the best pieces of literature that I've seen in a long time. You make me feel silly. This is only what years of scholarship and practice can yield. I'm glad Annabella has seen your work. She is the expert. TD
2007-12-10 15:02:26 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is beautiful and really sounds like the beginning of an epic. I think you could write a long narrative poem in this vein. Have you ever tried it?
2007-12-10 02:58:17 · answer #4 · answered by Lady Annabella-VInylist 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
OH!! HOW VERY Beautiful!!!
God Bless Woman, Man , Child and Soldier!!!
Merry Christmas!!
2007-12-10 22:25:59 · answer #5 · answered by Reenie: Mom of Marine 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Brilliant!
2007-12-10 19:11:41 · answer #6 · answered by TWOBOB 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is very powerful and moving. It has so much depth that I feel compelled to write it down and keep reading it so that all of the references and images can permeate my brain. Thank you once again for sharing your wonderful poetry.
2007-12-08 20:28:58 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
Yes, Mother Earth bears it all regardless. But we as the inhabitants of this magnificent domain must do all we can to protect her forever or she will be unable to sustain us anymore........
2007-12-08 22:48:41 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
I feel like it connects me with everything around me. I can feel the energy flowing through me. Wonderful. Thank You.
2007-12-08 20:50:35 · answer #9 · answered by moonstonefrogs 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Fascinating--the juxtaposition of the Torah and the mite of thorns. If I were to guess, I would say she is EVERYWOMAN.
2007-12-09 07:19:46 · answer #10 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I thought this was a very wonderful poem i felt very moved by it! thank you for sharing it with me!
2007-12-10 10:22:12 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋