Are these 3 sentences written well?

Question

I'm going to write these sentences in my mail to a professor for a graduate program as they have asked to contact the professors who share research interests with us.

- I wanted to ask wether you think that I would be able to work ([or] on my research) with you.
- and would also appreciate it very much if you could provide me with any other information that you might find useful in proceeding through my application and my further research.
-Having worked in the I.G.S company for more than a year, I am attracted to ...

Or else, how can they be written well and to be correct?

Answer 1

Basically, yes, these 3 sentences are a good start.
You might try shortening if you can and maybe some rewording to sound more impressive

Examples: 1. I wanted to ask whether or not we could collaborate in my research, specifically...
(asking if you are able might lead the professor to question your ability, even though this may not be your meaning - make an attempt to avoid this)(also, using the word collaborate or a synonymous word, meaning work together, helps you shorten the sentence and sound more intelligent)
2. -and would also appreciate any other information I need to include in the application process and in my further research...
(again, keep it short and sweet and to the point - I'm thinking the professors are reading through a lot of mail from different sources)
3. This sentence is good as is and is already along the lines of what you want for a finished copy of what you are going to send out.

Well, hope this helps give you some ideas. They're not set in stone, they're just guidelines, so feel free to use these examples and / or edit more as needed.

Answer 2

The are all very passive sentences.

i wanted to ask... and then you ask- ... he doesn't need you to explain to him that you are going to ask a question before you ask it.


Professor XXX,

Is there a possibility that I may research for you?
I would also appreciate any advice or information that you consider useful to me for future application and research endeavors.



Maybe it would be better if you posted the whole email for correction, because you want to make sure whoever corrects theses sentences uses the same tone and sound as the rest of the email.

Answer 3

I wanted to ask *WHETHER*...

...If you could provide me with any other information that *YOU THINK I* might find useful...

Other than that they are written well and are grammatically correct.

Answer 4

Dear Sir,
Greetings.Iam very keen to do research on--------------------
under your guidance.My C.V.is enclosed.I would appreciate
it if you give me your valuable suggestions.They will be useful for me in my aplication to the graduate program.
Thanking You
(signature)

Answer 5

whether