Is ThIs A gOOd PoEm?!?

Question

~death~

where do we go
what will i see
when death beckons me

everything has to go
i finnally see
what will happen to me

hiiii please nothing irrelavent also i want to know if it was any good i found it in an old notebook i wrote it in the beging of the year honesty please

gosh i know it isn't that good but couldn't you guess say you don't like it a little more tastefully i no it isnt good

~13=age

Answer 1

You are a little gem and I really enjoy your poetry...It is a short poem but it says it all.Don't listen to those idiots that put you down, I bet they didn't write like you when they were 13..I like how you ask a deep question at the beginning of the poem and then I love how you are able to answer it ..so simply at the end...you are showing real skill in this one

Answer 2

There is always room for improvement. I would like to see your idea a little more expanded, and descriptive. It is a basis poem I would say. You can use this poem to work off of to help make a full and great poem. After I read it you feel it is missing the true meaning of poetry, work hard it at and I promise you will get better. You are only 13 so you have a lot of time to grow to your potential so keep trying.
I think Klepto may have got your poem's problems about right.

Answer 3

For your age it's very good. Everybody brings their own bias to their interpretation, and my bias is that, in my opinion, you will not "finally see what will happen" to you. I hope I'm wrong, but there's nothing to suggest that the mind goes on living after the brain dies.

Answer 4

too short, and too frank. sorry but together its just an obvious question about death, which wouldnt be a bad gist for a poem, just yours isnt much of a poem, theres nothing thoughtful or deep in it, but if that is deep for you than you have a dense mind. but i dont even know you or your age, u should just make haikus if you like short poems

Answer 5

A nice little exploration. It's good to try to say volumes with 4 words per line. Very nice. You get a star. TD

Answer 6

I just wanted to say that I wish I was a level 2 so I could give Klepto a thumbs up.

Answer 7

That was so great, you got my attention, but 1 negative thing, i wanted it to be longer so im sad, but you had me hooked and mezmorized and intriged. That was deep.

Answer 8

If you want an honest critique,
I'll tell you quite plainly that it's rather bleak,
In structure and word choice somewhat weak;
Ordinary, simple, and not very unique.

Answer 9

yes it is a good poem---- a little dark but that's ok, but why stop there................... can I touch, will I feel , will I see beyond those trees, can i fly like a bird-- will I be ,as though a broken watch is glaring at me? what is it actually saying.......................have I to die..........it is good run with it ..

Answer 10

i little weak.
use more descriptive words in a poem. but it isn't that bad.