It's so hot, like workin' in an oven
It's too hot, don't you know I'm burnin'
It's so hot, this workin's got me bummin'
And I've got to slow down
Ain't no doubt, I'm fryin' in a furnace
Ain't no way, I can keep goin' on
Now I'm cooked, time to turn me over
Gotta' let her cool me down
Chorus:
Cold clear water
Down from a mountain stream
Cold clear water
Soak me in my dreams
Cold clear water
Splash me with your smile
In your cold clear water
I can swim for miles and miles and miles
I see your candle burnin' in the window
How can such a small flame light up the night
What you cookin' up in the oven
Glad to see you got the furnace on high
Chorus
2007-12-06 23:57:20 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Thanks Moon. That's what I was going for, hot then cold then hot then cold...that chorus is something many musicians like. I'm very proud of how simple the words and musical phrasing are.
2007-12-07 00:57:26 · update #1
I like this one, a lot!! This in another one I've made up my own melody to...it's a winner!!!!!
2007-12-07 06:35:58 · answer #1 · answered by Holiday Magic 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
What's my morning word? COFFFEEEEEEEEE...
This is a cheery, lighthearted poem...it starts out sort of sad for the worker, but then takes a 180, and she's glad to know there's heat in the place she's going to. Nice rythmn, pace, and good images that tell the reader exactly what she's going through!
Liked it...bunches.
Elysabeth Faslund...Poemhunter.com
2007-12-07 00:38:24 · answer #2 · answered by Elysabeth 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Oh boy...i wish someone would write me something like this. Coz it's gonna make me feel like the hottest girl on earth!
But on top of all...i really, really love your chorus. It's so soothing! =)
2007-12-07 00:47:41 · answer #3 · answered by Dark Dickinsonian 4 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Yes, I agree with my little cabbage : clearly rhinocarpal.
2007-12-07 00:56:28 · answer #4 · answered by Lady Annabella-VInylist 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
it's fine, but you misspelled *I'm horny*
did you write using the French *rhinocarpal* method ?
2007-12-07 00:41:41 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 1⤋
Yes good!
Rinocarpal.
Horny wrist,
Clever,,,,,,,,
NOT!
2007-12-07 05:17:34 · answer #6 · answered by TWOBOB 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yeah, its not bad.
2007-12-07 00:00:31 · answer #7 · answered by PunkRocKa25 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
hey! that's my heart singing there
2007-12-07 00:10:25 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋