Do You Like This Story? You know the one....?

Question

weIl, you prob havent because I wrote this when I was bored the other day, but I wanna know if this sounds good or if you guys have any advice. and last time when I posted it, it was too long so ppl didnt answer it lol...So i'll just do a part of it :)


Run. Run! That was all I could think but my feet did nothing. I wished I could run, dreamed it. But I couldn’t. As I stared into the eyes of fastly approaching man/my capture, I knew this would not end well. I knew I had to do something, but what I didn’t even know. I inched backward and my capture inched forward, he knew I could nothing. I dash and he grabbed me. I felt a pain I had never felt before as he tightened his grip. I fought to breathe as he squeezed me like a starving boa squeezing his prey. “Please.” I gasped. With an instant he let me go and stared at me with disgust. I was weak and mad at myself for not running when I had the chance. “Foolish girl, why would I kill you when I need you?” he spat like he loathed the words coming out of his mouth. “Take me to the ___, and I might spare your life.”

Answer 1

Seriously...if you ever finish it, I'd like to have a copy. I love a good story, especially one I've never heard before.

Answer 2

Its miraculous...
Advice...as you advance in grade...classes get harder...
your diction and vocabulary increase...
GOOD JOB