what do you think.....?

Question

BACK ALONG THAT DUSTY ROAD,
I WALK ALONE THIS TIME...
I CLUTCH THOSE MEMORIES IN MY HEART,
AND ON MY LIPS I HOLD THAT RHYME....

YOU USED TO SAY YOU'D NEVER LEAVE,
YOU'D NEVER WALK AWAY....
BUT WHAT TOOK PLACE THAT MORNING,
WOULD NEVER FORCE YOU TO STAY.

YOU PACKED YOUR BAGS
AND TOOK YOUR BELONGINGS,
BUT NEVER ONCE LOOKED BACK....
I STOOD AND STARRED INTO THE DISTANCE...
AND HOPED YOU WOULD COME BACK.

NOW I TREAD THOSE FAMILIAR PATHS,
ALTHOUGH ALONE I WALK...
I PICTURE YOUR SMILE AT EVERY STEP, I TAKE ALONG THIS ROAD.

I SLOW DOWN PAST THE WATERFALL,
THAT ONE YOU LOVED SO MUCH...
I TAKE A GLANCE INTO THE STREAM,
BUT NEVER DARE TO TOUCH...
THIS PICTURE LOOKS SO PERFECT,
I WISH YOU COULD SEE IT NOW
I WONDER IN MY MIND
THE THINGS YOU WOULD HAVE SAID AND HOW.....

I'M BACK ALONE ON THAT DUSTY ROAD,
THOSE MEMORIES LEFT BEHIND....
TO FLOW AWAY INTO MY PAST
AND TO NEVER TURN BACK THE HANDS OF TIME......!

Answer 1

some didn't exactly flow, but most of it was pretty good, but then...I'm no expert either. Maybe you should look into being a songwriter. Alot of those famous singers don't write their own stuff, they can't. Their talent is their voice, so they sing. Your talent is writing songs, and they're pretty good.

Answer 2

Yawwwwnnnnn :0

Answer 3

Not bad at all

I really like it actually, probably because I can relate to it in many ways.

Its kind of like honest to your emotions, you put the emotions in it, and really let it shows.

Keep on writing =)

Answer 4

I think i remember that song

Answer 5

I never knew you were a poet ...... and you point fingers at me !

Answer 6

good-did you right it? show me more!!