R you smart enogh for this poem? i need critics!!!?

Question

Death

Death is a factor,
we all will face,
so why be afraid,
wheen we know,
we r going to a better place,
or is it hell that we will face,
still either way we will face,
it,
it must be faced,
no one can prove,
right or wrong,
they were gone b4 i asked,
will i meet them above,
under,
beneath,
what will happen,
what will i face,
Death is what i will face,
everyone i know is just another face,
how can it be,
Death is faced.
Death



-okatri

Answer 1

Your poem needs work in the editing. Use conventional and proper English and try to eliminate unnecessary repetitious words and phrases.

I understand what you're attempting to convey to the reader about death and that it must be faced. Your creation, however, cries to be rearranged, edited for capitalization and correct English usage.

If you want to be a writer--whether it is in prose or in the narrative, concentrate on the tools of the trade.

Answer 2

This seems to have some potential but it will need alot of work to get there. If you use repetition try to say the same thing, but differently using exact words can get tiresome.

Answer 3

Grammatically flawed, no emotion and the reader is pulled into many different directions, wich in turn subjegates the natural flow of your writing, re-write.

Answer 4

Death- Good or bad. Heaven or Hell,Happy or sad. Just believe and God will relieve. Love Poetry, just not very good with it.

Answer 5

Death is a factor

Answer 6

r u preeeepared 2 b let down?

Answer 7

start up with this. lim x-->0 (cos 2x) = one million lim x-->0 (sin 2x) = 0 Then we've: lim x-->0 (cot 2x / sin 2x) = lim x-->0 (cos 2x / sin^2 2x) = +? if approached from the beneficial facet and lim x-->0 (cos 2x / sin^2 2x) = -? if approached from the destructive facet

Answer 8

omg i dnt thingk im smart enuff! is ur pome abowt DETH or sumthen????!!!!!!!!!1 wut r u tryen 2 say???????????????????????

EDIT: Oh yeah, use "face" a few more times. I really like that word.