Is This Good?

Question

I was bored the other day, so I just started writing...but I wanna know if this sounds good or if you guys have any advice.

Run. Run! That was all I could think but my feet did nothing. I wished I could run, dreamed it. But I couldn’t. As I stared into the eyes of fastly approaching man/my capture, I knew this would not end well. I knew I had to do something, but what I didn’t even know. I inched backward and my capture inched forward, he knew I could nothing. I dash and he grabbed me. I felt a pain I had never felt before as he tightened his grip. I fought to breathe as he squeezed me like a starving boa squeezing his prey. “Please.” I gasped. With an instant he let me go and stared at me with disgust. I was weak and mad at myself for not running when I had the chance. “Foolish girl, why would I kill you when I need you?” he spat like he loathed the words coming out of his mouth. “Take me to the ___, and I might spare your life.”

I stared at him like he was crazy because he was. “I don’t know what your—” “THE _____!” he yelled, cutting me off. “Please…just let me go. I—” I whispered. “Let you go?!” He laughed a worst tone I have ever heard, only making me more afraid. How I got here I don’t even know. How I was going to get out was an even bigger mystery. He moved toward me and I flinched, hoping he wouldn’t grab me again. He balled him hand into a fist and punched the wall, leaving a whole the size of ____ and tear slipped down my cold cheek. “Don’t you look at me and cry,” he said. I bit my bottom lip to stop the trembling, and touched my heart shaped necklace. “You must be mistaken. You have the wrong girl, I—” I was really getting tired of him cutting me off. “You are not the wrong girl…I know your not.” My mind raced and I squeezed my eyes shut. Don’t be afraid. Don’t let people bully you _____. You’re stronger than you think you are, and never forget that. My dad’s words rushed through my mind.

“I can’t dad. I just can’t.” I whispered to myself. He turned toward me and I thought he had heard. “Get up. We’re leaving.” He said like he owned me. “Where are we going?” I asked unsure. He shot me a glance and I knew he would never tell me. “Well I’m not going anywhere with you.” I said defiantly. He laughed again, “Look here girlie. We can do this the easy way or the hard way,” He gave me an ugly stare. “Both end with you coming with me.” He finished and then gave me a challenging stare. I stared right back at him not going to back down, or be timid. I would stand up for myself…maybe. Several minutes passed before he said, “If you don’t come with me right now you’ll be riding in the trunk.” He said never dropping my gaze. I bit my bottom lip. He must have been 3 times bigger than me and had more then 100 pounds. I weighed my options and chances. “If I come with you right now I don’t have to ride in the trunk?” I asked untrustingly. “You will be comfortable.”

He smiled. “No, I didn’t ask if I would be comfortable, I asked if I had to ride in the TRUNK.” He sighed. “No, you wont have to ride in the trunk. Happy?” I glared at him. “No. I’m not happy. I’d be happy if I weren’t here,” I ground out, and thought…“Do you promise I wont have to ride in the trunk?” he looked at me, his eyes shining, “I promise.” “And why should I trust you?” “I never asked you to. Either believe me or don’t.” I groaned and then pushed past him, trying to at least get him to stumble. He just stood like a brick wall looking at me like I must me out of my mind! How dare he! I ground my teeth. He took the lead and grasped his hand around my forearm. “What are you doing?” I hissed. He just gave me that look again. I mumbled under my breath, hoping he didn’t hear. He pushed the big metal door and a gush of cold wind hit me smack in the face. I shivered, and tried to bite back the freezing cold. We reached his car and he let me go.

. I sighed in relief and went to open the car door; he grabbed me again only rougher this time. “What are you doing you lunatic!?” I screamed as he took be to the back of the car. When he popped open the trunk I got what he was going to do. “NO!” I yelled. “If you really think I’m getting in there you’re either crazier or dumber than you look!” he shot me another glace. And I knew he was still going to push me into there. “You promised you w—” I started. He look me dead in the face, “I lied.” He said easily, as he pushed me in.

I know its kinda long sry :) but plz read it

the ____means i dont know what to put there like her name and what he needs her for...

Answer 1

very good...
too short...
lol...
I like a good story and this one had me hangin...
please finish it...
I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS...
lol

Answer 2

Diamonds.


I LOVE A MYSTERY

Answer 3

Alright...ya sucked me in, now I need more!

Answer 4

well its really good!! but im kinda confused. who is the guy and what are all the ____ supposed to be??
other than that, its good!! really good!! what happens next?!?!

Answer 5

omg that was SO good!!! will you please tell the rest??? lol
I want to know the end!