Can You Make These Better ????????

Question

ok i just need to take these sentances & make them better... you can do anything you want just please make it good thanxs. {like change the order, words, break into more sentances.. etc thanxs !!!!}


1. There was an event in my life involving a mentally challanged person that changed my selfish perspective of the mentally challanged forever.

2. At lunch we were no better, we stood in line and made fun of a mentally challanged person who could never get the plastic wrap off his pretzel, and his down-sydrome “girlfriend” who sat next to him (and totally flirted with him).

3. I never went and found these people I had hurt to apologise to them.


THANK YOU .
ps. i am not this cruel

Answer 1

1. My selfish perspective of the mentally challenged altered dramatically after a significant event in my life.

2. At lunch we were no better. For instance, while waiting in line, we would make fun of a mentally disabled person and his down-syndrome 'girlfriend ' for their inablity to unwrap a pretzel.

3. I regret never finding the victims of our bullying to apologize.

i don't know what kind of writing assignment this is so you might want to change the tone. btw this sounds really f*cked up but if you say aren't that cruel then you aren't...yeah right.

Answer 2

1. I had an experience with a mentally challanged person that changed my selfish perspective of the disabled forever.
2. During lunch, we made fun of a mentally challanged person who struggled get the plastic wrap off his pretzel as we stood in line, and when his down-sydrome “girlfriend” who sat next to him (and totally flirted with him).
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3. I regret never finding these people who I've hurt to apologise to them.

Answer 3

1. An event in my life involving a mentally challenged person changed my selfish perspective of the mentally challenged forever. [Note the spelling:challEnge.]

2. At lunch we were no better,. We stood in line and made fun of a mentally challenged boy who could never get the plastic wrap off his pretzel, and of his Down-syndrome “girlfriend” who sat next to him and flirted with him. [Try another adverb instead of "totally."]

3. I never went and found these people I had hurt to apologise to them. [If you're American, the verb is spelled "apologiZe." If you're British, your spelling is the right one.]

All in all, pretty good as you had it.

Answer 4

I had a wonderful, life-changing experience that forever freed me of my selfish perspective of the mentally challenged.

We were no better while waiting in the lunch line, where we often found ourselves teasing a handicapped boy who struggled to remove the plastic wrap from his pretzel. All the while his 'girlfriend' , with Down's Syndrome, sat flirting with him oblivious to our taunting.

Unfortunately, though I meant to, I have never found these people so that I could apologize.

Answer 5

There's a reason why teachers give assignments like these. They're given to improve YOUR grammar and punctuation. It's awesome that we're able to help out with difficult homework via the internet, but we should be giving you advice, and information, not doing it for you!