i say it's about the lessons you don't want to learn from,
the mistakes you don't want to change,
the constant fall to the bitter end is more welcomed than you have lead everyone to believe.
typical ways for an even more predictable mind.
where does it come from?
the debates,
unexpected fates,
tempted wrongs,
with an only wiser outcome.
it's either all or nothing.
today or to late.
to much or to selfish.
i say no more,
no less,
stop thinking,
start pushing,
all the things you did,
didn't,
wanted,
unfinished.
the constant cries for the same ending,
what a time to go away.
when you realize,
you are nothing more,
less,
but just equal to the same decayed beings we all walk above.
we are the walking dead,
in mind and spirit.
2007-12-03 19:08:09 · 6 answers · asked by Miss Madeline 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Well I would have to say it is well written, poised and grammatically correct, however it is subjegated and the reader finds themsleves pulled into to many drections at one time, but well done.
2007-12-03 19:26:23 · answer #1 · answered by kissaled 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sure, but your conclusions are all wrong. We are not the walking dead. We are the wondering, worrying, rejoicing living! It's our job to dance on the necrodic flesh or our forebearers. That's what they would want for us anyway.
But then...
I'm no poet.
2007-12-04 03:16:44 · answer #2 · answered by Pragmatism Please 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
There's so much going on in there. You could've picked one of the ideas that you stated and worked on it. You could've continued with the two first lines that, sort of, have the same idea. Remember rhyming and imaging.
However, if it was your fisrt it was ok.
2007-12-04 03:27:23 · answer #3 · answered by Little Ryan 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Very nice.
2007-12-04 03:10:59 · answer #4 · answered by Ali 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That would be a great OTEP song.
2007-12-04 03:10:20 · answer #5 · answered by Brian 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
so what's the question?
2007-12-04 03:11:22 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋