What now?
Disaster..i tried...
not sure if i lied
in any case..this is bad
i pray to not freeze your heart..but..
we're heading for a cold up front
no time to mop a puddle..i won't.
we cannot ride without a saddle
and not while our horses are tangled;
I drew a sketch of you in a silhouette
because there was no color in my pallette.
2007-12-03 11:33:53 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
palette! dang! can't even spell correctly...=P soreeee
2007-12-03 11:36:21 · update #1
Okay thanks for the constructive criticisms...Now for the meaning of the poem?
2007-12-03 12:03:26 · update #2
@Noah
hahaha! but i'm no indian and my butt is super fragile! woohoo! =P
2007-12-03 13:42:08 · update #3
The meaning is that of despair. She is begging somebody to just lighten up her life. There are so many things holding her back, such as a saddle (we cannot ride without a saddle), and the truth which isn't obvious to her (not sure if I lied). How can one be unsure if they lied? She is so confused about life that she is left to paint the silhouette of someone rather than the full outlook because there was no "color" which is a metaphor for optimism or hope.
2007-12-03 12:41:04 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous Girl 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
The Poem Is About Lies, How They Mess Everything Up, And One Cannot Achieve Or Move On To Greater Things.
"We Cannot Ride Without A Saddle" Why Not? The Indians Sure Managed.
2007-12-03 21:34:59 · answer #2 · answered by ? 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
i think that the "poet wanna be" is way too hard on herself. i think that you wrote this poem thinking "okay this will be a poem and it will be great". you can't do that. Poetry has to come to you. I think you had a few lines and struggled to make them rhyme and were unsure how to end it. I think that you are emotional and have a lot to say. This poem shows frustration and expresses that you have tried and failed at soemthng multiple times. I think the "you" character is some one you are struggling to understand. Keep writing but don't try too hard. This is great but seems unfinished, keep trying and good luck. PS: i'm sorry if that hurt your feelings, that's just what i got out of it. You seem vulnerable but expressive. there is nothing wrong with that, and if you truly write from your heart then it can even be a good thing. Love julia
2007-12-03 19:55:52 · answer #3 · answered by *Julia* 3 · 3⤊ 0⤋
I like the last two lines; they are excellent. The rest does need work. I guess you're not saying outright whether you are the poet, but if you are or if it's anyone else, I don't think the term 'wanna-be' is helpful. Writing good poetry takes lots of work and even great poets get frustrated. This poem has a problem that lots of lets call them 'developing poets' demonstrate. There's too much abstraction. "Not in ideas, but in things" as W.C. Williams wrote, meaning a poem should show the reader, not be on a level of abstraction that is impersonal
2007-12-03 19:39:54 · answer #4 · answered by holacarinados 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
The poem seems to indicate that the writer would perhaps do well to post a question in the "Family & Relationships" category. =P
2007-12-03 20:47:06 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
I loved the last two lines like the other guy......
Try to go with the flow.........
2007-12-03 20:24:44 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Can't figure this one out.
2007-12-03 23:13:35 · answer #7 · answered by ? 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
depressing.
2007-12-03 19:42:03 · answer #8 · answered by ? 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋