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Question

ok. my class is doing a replica of the confederation. My character is george brown and i'm for confederation. Pls read over my speech and add comments. PLs give points to make it sound stronger.

_____Imagine a country of peace, footprints embedded around the crops in the rich soil of Rupert's land. Barriers of trade long shattered, no beggars slept on the streets. Our names will be recognized, our act; legendary. Our country will become strong and powerful, bonded with the intercolonial railways. Loyal soldiers defend our free nation against the tyrants of America(no offence). Our justice, unchallenged as it always condemn the sinned. Imagine what it will be when one day, the U.S. feared US; depended on US for trade. Then we shall be all-mighty, but now; let's take one small step at a time and give our future generation the chance to hold their heads up high and proud.

Answer 1

Your grammar's a bit woozey. Try this:-

Imagine a country of peace. Think of footprints embedded around the crops in the rich soil of Rupert's land. Barriers of trade long shattered and no beggars sleeping on the streets. Our names will be recognized, our act will be remembered as legendary. Our country will become strong and powerful, bonded by the intercolonial railways. Loyal soldiers will defend our free nation against the tyrants of America(no offence). Our justice will go unchallenged, as it always condemns those who sin and protects those sinned against. Imagine what it will be like when, one day, the United States. feared US; depended on US for trade instead of the other way round. Then we shall be all-mighty, but now; let's take one small step at a time and give our future generations the chance to hold their heads up high and with pride.