I could play in mud,
I could jump in bush,
And I could bath in rain…..
I wish I could be a kid again.
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is it good for a start of new poem? title I WISH...
i am 21 thou
2007-12-02 22:48:05 · 15 answers · asked by VG! 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
if you really like it, i will send you the full poem when i done..
2007-12-03 06:00:14 · update #1
Cool~so nice~
2007-12-03 00:05:42 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
not sure about jump in bush but it's pretty good. For inspiration, watch Finding Neverland. Your poem sounds like its about childhood and eternal youth which is the basis of the film. Great scenes in the film of youth, like fantasy games of pirates and cowboys and indians etc.
2007-12-02 22:52:47 · answer #2 · answered by specs appeal 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like you could turn it into a really fun poem.
FYI - bathe in the rain (not bath)
2007-12-02 22:50:34 · answer #3 · answered by Canadian Kim 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it! I think a lot of us can look back on childhood and find things we miss that were so carefree- I think I Wish is a good title.
2007-12-02 22:59:31 · answer #4 · answered by michelle 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
NO...because "jump in bush" makes u sound like a perverted kid.
2007-12-02 22:50:58 · answer #5 · answered by ♥Mrs. Timberlake♥ 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Yup
2007-12-02 22:49:53 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
yeah it's nice..
but i already read a poem something like that..only the thought i mean
2007-12-02 22:51:37 · answer #7 · answered by m0de 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes I think so....
I like the sound of this as my saying in life is...
We don't stop playing because we grow old
We grow old because we stop playing ;0)
2007-12-02 22:50:26 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
For a poem.. sounds sort of.. elementary..
2007-12-02 22:51:02 · answer #9 · answered by LokoLobo 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
dammit. that's exactly i am feeling right now. i just want to get out of this ******** thing and having fun my old friends
2007-12-02 23:17:42 · answer #10 · answered by ItzJonn 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋