Do you think this poem is any good?
Does it stink, or smell how it should?
Will you blink, and smile how you would?
Will it upset you, talking of itself?
Will it add to your mind's wealth?
Will it help you find literary health?
Will it exile you, from it's self?
Will you be upset, if it doesn't flow.
...Honestly, I don't know...
Who cares?
2007-12-02 09:04:15 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
It's quite nice but I personally don't like the rhyming on every line. I like the abab poems.
But a poem is to express yourself so if you like it that is all that matters.
2007-12-02 09:12:22 · answer #1 · answered by !Lloyd! 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It is all right. Not excellent, but all right.
I have no opposition to the free-verse style of it. I usually write poetry in that same fashion. Although you do have some rhymes arranged within it, there are elements within the body of the poem that are sort of free-verse.
On a scale of one to ten, it gets a five.
It is not entirely devoid of imagination. You evidently did come up with a few lines that have depth and meaning. For example, I like the line "Will it exile you, from itself."
Truly and surely, there have been poems that have been less impressive than this. It is an okay piece of work, but falls short of being something extraordinary.
2007-12-02 09:15:08 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Poetry can't literally stink, it can suck. But I will make a literal exception and say this stinks.
However, nothing can replace the human compassion. Keep on going, and try to develop a flow.
2007-12-02 15:53:43 · answer #3 · answered by Jrahdel 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the 2d i met you i ought to declare i felt interested in you so at a loss for words as to what i might desire to do i promised i wouldn't in any respect fall in love with you As time glided by using The greater I knew you And the time I spent faraway from you i think of it hit me no longer elementary As to how lots i truthfully cared for you You never relatively cared approximately me Is what i assumed I had considered yet you incredibly fool me once you start to act so heavily What do you want from me? And why do you nevertheless call me continuously? Replaying each little thing you ever did to me? no longer something is wise anymore I didn’t want you at the instant I do Now situations have replaced lots So quickly That I don’t think of I’ll ever get that threat What loopy situations we spent no longer understanding what the the two one human beings ever needed from one yet another Now we merely replay all the memories we ever spent jointly purely wishing the moments we get to communicate ought to final purely a 2d longer
2016-10-18 21:17:28 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
lol
I actually think it's good. It flows nicely, and it's very cute :)
but... "Will you blink, and smile how you would?" doesn't really make sense...
It doesn't have to rhyme
2007-12-02 09:11:16 · answer #5 · answered by Leela 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I love DR.SUESS thats what your poem reminds me of.
GOOD JOB ------mabey u should quit your day job
2007-12-02 09:26:30 · answer #6 · answered by saveitok 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I really like it! it made me smile :D
2007-12-02 09:43:01 · answer #7 · answered by mk 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
that poems awsome its great i just ate!!!!!:D
2007-12-02 09:12:16 · answer #8 · answered by TheLoser. 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋